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Ariel70, Of course I loved this. It sounds so much like the Spain that I brought back home in my memories after my visit there.
posted by
TAPS.
on December 18, 2005 at 3:13 PM
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Gifted story teller with an uncompared understanding and loving attachment to your environment and characters.Cheers
posted by
Flame-thrower
on December 15, 2005 at 1:18 AM
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Very Descriptive
Ariel, you have a very poetic sense of the language and your writing appeals strongly to the senses. I would be careful, however, to focus more on the story and sprinkle your descriptive passages between passages that develop the characters and move the storyline forward. Who are the main characters? What do they want? What prevents them from getting it? What are the differences between the focus characters -- these are the things that you, as the storyteller, should be asking. But I very much enjoyed reading the passage and taking in the imagery.
posted by
writersjourney
on December 14, 2005 at 7:48 PM
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The imagery is concrete, evocative and compelling. l am pleased there is a part 2.
posted by
babe_rocks
on December 14, 2005 at 4:19 PM
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Ariel
Wonderful writing! Wonderful! I am there! I see it all! I feel it on my skin.
posted by
Tiel
on December 14, 2005 at 4:00 PM
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