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Re: Kabu
Thank you!
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BigV
on July 8, 2025 at 8:51 AM
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Re: Pat
Thank you. That is why I put stuff here. If you notice a problem, please point it out. I am still letting that story simmer before it goes out to be published.
I will add a few phrases as you suggested.
THANK YOU!!!
posted by
BigV
on July 8, 2025 at 8:50 AM
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I can say with absolute truth that your writing is truly professional.
posted by
Kabu
on July 8, 2025 at 8:10 AM
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Cute joke. 
posted by
Sherri_G
on July 8, 2025 at 7:22 AM
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I thought your dialogue was clear. It wouldn't hurt to insert a phrase such as 'he set his cup down' or 'she topped off his cup' - a "stage directions" kind of thing if you feel something is unclear, but this granny had no question about who was saying what. Thanks for the joke.
posted by
Pat_B
on July 8, 2025 at 5:57 AM
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