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Re: RamFamilyWritings
Thank you for the objective comment BC-A. Your visit and your support are appreciated. 
posted by
RamfamilyWritings
on November 13, 2012 at 2:01 PM
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Hello CCT, your comment is very much appreciated. I welcome criticism, negative or otherwise, as it's most often the negative comments that teach us the most, regardless of the intention of the writer. People can praise all day long, and although it feels good and strokes the ego, it does little to actually make us better writers. As for your personal preferences, I respect them to the utmost and would not be offended at all if this type of writing isn't your cup of tea and you chose not to read it. I use the slang in the context of the character and the scene where I feel it's appropriate and adds the right ambiance to the story line. I agree with you on the morality of it, and have taught my children the proper names of their anatomy and what they are used for. As for my own well being, CCT, this story, I assure you is purely fictional, although, there may be some basis of reality to it I am not promoting the "business" of internet porn or prostitution, and the story itself, if one follows it to the end, hopefully, sees there is a message of morality to it. I do not, and would not mention a specific "organization" I merely suggest, what most of us already know and have probably run into at one time or another in our internet searches. This story is about a woman named Crystal, but in actuality, she is a combination of many young mothers struggling in today's society, her ventures are extreme, of course, but not unrealistic. The scenes and the language are graphic, which is why I put up the warning in bold, unmistakenly, large letters, so that anyone who may be offended has the option to pass it by. I would not want to deceive or inadvertently direct someone to read this erotic tale without knowing fully what it is they will come across.
Be it good or bad, there is a following for this type of writing, and my only intention in posting it here on blogit, is to get just what you have so graciously given, constructive criticism. So I thank you for your honesty and forthrightness. I appreciate your visit and respect your views. Have a wonderful day CCT and I hope this doesn't run you away from reading our other pages, even if my story isn't for you.
posted by
RamfamilyWritings
on November 13, 2012 at 1:48 PM
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Well I have one or too comments to make, sadly no one ever criticizes on this site so one must always think more negative than positive. On the negative side I would prefer not to read slang to describe any sexual function or part of the body. That is only my preference. More important for your own well being, I would not mention the provider of such a service. Perhaps I am being hypersensitive, but anything to do with porn is taboo here at the moment and a suggestion that an organisation might be involved would send everyone bananas. Otherwise it is steamy as it is meant to be and sad that such actions can be sold, although better this than destructive acts. 
posted by
C_C_T
on November 13, 2012 at 7:03 AM
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RamFamilyWritings
SBut the senses are used effectively and structurally. You touch your topic love. BC-A, Bill’s R®st
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BC-A
on November 13, 2012 at 5:39 AM
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