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You capture the plight of the poor so well in this poem...My heart goes out to them. No one should have to live like that.
posted by
FormerStudentIntern
on March 15, 2012 at 9:48 AM
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but I will lay what I have at the door
not much help
posted by
Lanetay
on March 15, 2012 at 7:45 AM
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I like this...it gives a good depiction of another side that isn't seen that often. Inexpensive parka type coats can be very warm; they seem to magnify body heat. Do you have any discount stores there like Walmart?
posted by
mariss9
on March 15, 2012 at 6:43 AM
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I think you are doing fine without help.
posted by
TAPS.
on March 15, 2012 at 5:34 AM
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I will never eat a potato again without thinking of such hard work put into action by your loving hands. 
posted by
Butterfly-1950
on March 15, 2012 at 3:52 AM
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Kabu you poor thing I must send you a couple of dollars so you can buy a wheel for a wheelbarrow. I suppose this will be your potential harvest this year, indeed the harvesting of potatoes is backbreaking work, I have done it for six pence an hour. I can empathise entirely with your poem T wish it were not so realistic I am beginning to ache all over.
posted by
C_C_T
on March 15, 2012 at 1:04 AM
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posted by
Annicita
on March 14, 2012 at 11:24 PM
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This just tears at my heart, well done.
posted by
UtahJay
on March 14, 2012 at 10:22 PM
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A Great piece !
Love these words, this style of poetry is my fave, prompting vivid images in my mind. 
posted by
WaterKat
on March 14, 2012 at 9:44 PM
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Kabu
Very impressive! But may you be spared that experience...
posted by
Nautikos
on March 14, 2012 at 8:17 PM
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I love this just as you have written! 
posted by
BrightIrish
on March 14, 2012 at 7:22 PM
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Help? I cannot imagine how or where you needed help. That was great. I loved it, totally.
posted by
Justi
on March 14, 2012 at 7:11 PM
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I thought the refrain was superb! It sets a nice tone for the poem! As far as help with it, I really don't think you need to do anything with it unless you were to look at it later on and something sparked for you! The ending really makes the reader think, and I like that in a poem! sam
posted by
sam444
on March 14, 2012 at 3:46 PM
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Wow, that is great, Dear Kabu!
Evoked images of the potato famine in my mind; maybe that isn't the theme or reason, but it's what I thought of. You should write more poetry! 
posted by
Katray2
on March 14, 2012 at 3:40 PM
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Kabuiepie-;)
It is absolutely beautiful as it is love, all I could see was your image doing that gardening, that poem is so alive and don't change a thing. Crikey if you need help what the heck do I need?
posted by
WileyJohn
on March 14, 2012 at 3:33 PM
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I especially like the title...
and I wouldn't change it.
posted by
Pat_B
on March 14, 2012 at 3:07 PM
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This is brilliant Grandmummy! I think you should leave it exactly as it is...
posted by
lovelyladymonk
on March 14, 2012 at 1:06 PM
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