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I just read the whole story again, from the first post , and I loved

it. You can easily develop it into a book.

and yes childhood is a gift for the develping psyche. It is the strongest influence on who we are to become. :)

posted by Tzippy on July 1, 2010 at 7:20 AM | link to this | reply

what great fun it is to read a good story from an author you know and love
you have talent and skill to write a thriller and a story that will keep you captivated.

posted by Tzippy on July 1, 2010 at 7:05 AM | link to this | reply

On my second read, I have concluded you have an unusual skill at mystery writing.  I am sure all these characters are real and can visualize them all to some degree, even though they are only based on reality.  Well done. 

posted by mariss9 on July 1, 2010 at 6:04 AM | link to this | reply

Wow, Kabu! Great story!! The mirror was there to witness the man agonize alone and suffer all those years for what had happened to his life, and also there to watch "one person who knows. He scares me." finally do him in. Loved it!

So sorry to hear about your friend in Australia. Sending you a big, warm hug of support.

posted by adnohr on June 30, 2010 at 11:13 PM | link to this | reply

A great suspense-thriller very well told! 

posted by shamasehar on June 30, 2010 at 10:34 PM | link to this | reply

Kabu
What a great stryteller yoy are. Admirable, and soabsorbing. Keep writing, all of us are waiting for more

posted by anib on June 30, 2010 at 8:41 PM | link to this | reply

end of mystery
great story..who had he become? /LB

posted by MsJudy on June 30, 2010 at 8:33 PM | link to this | reply

who had he become?

posted by Lanetay on June 30, 2010 at 8:12 PM | link to this | reply

Excellently written Kabu.

posted by shobana on June 30, 2010 at 7:36 PM | link to this | reply

Kabuiepie-;)
And here all these months I thought you were sleeping beside me, HAH!!! You're dreamin' up the best darn stories that's what you're doin', you don't sleep. FANTASTIC!!!! and of course I love you darlin'.

posted by WileyJohn on June 30, 2010 at 7:09 PM | link to this | reply

Well done, Kabu!

posted by teddypoet_TheGoodByeFade on June 30, 2010 at 6:19 PM | link to this | reply

Kabu
A great story! And, as others have suggested - might there be more where that came from?

posted by Nautikos on June 30, 2010 at 6:16 PM | link to this | reply

so very good
Will there be more?  Rosie says hi.

posted by skye08 on June 30, 2010 at 5:57 PM | link to this | reply

very well done, Kabu, and you've left the door open for a sequel
if you feel to add one, or just continue this story with a Part Two....I agree with what's been commented on regarding the mirror - you could really go further with it, if you want to...

posted by Rumor on June 30, 2010 at 1:32 PM | link to this | reply

It is always difficult to call it a day Kabu, it was a good story, but I shouldn't think you feel like writing much with Wiley being under the weather. It is such a shame he was making such a good job of the veranda. He is a professional not many about these days, look after yourselves. 

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posted by C_C_T on June 30, 2010 at 12:35 PM | link to this | reply

Wow... xoxoxo

posted by Sinome on June 30, 2010 at 11:59 AM | link to this | reply

Spellbinding!

posted by Nita09 on June 30, 2010 at 11:57 AM | link to this | reply

How terrible for the man to feel he had to maintain his silence all those years.  But who would have believed him?  An excellent, thought-provoking story. 

posted by mariss9 on June 30, 2010 at 11:50 AM | link to this | reply

Highly intriguing and well done, Dear Kabu!
I do agree with Pat on perhaps adding more details about the mirror; I was wondering about it in an earlier post. A good, quality read - Kudos!   

posted by Katray2 on June 30, 2010 at 11:24 AM | link to this | reply

Oooohhhh...don't leave us here, Grandmummy!  Please???!!!  You have

posted by lovelyladymonk on June 30, 2010 at 11:09 AM | link to this | reply

Kabu, I've gone through and read it again....
It is so creepy and cool. My only suggestion, when you get around to editing and sending to a magazine -- is to play up the mirror, make it more central to the story. Maybe it was his wife's mirror, an heirloom or something they bought together on their honeymoon. Maybe it has a lovely carved gilt frame, witnessed their parting scene when he was packing to leave, etc., etc.  It knows he was spying, and who gave him the hush money.  Woman, you sure have a gift for setting the reader's imagination free! 

posted by Pat_B on June 30, 2010 at 10:31 AM | link to this | reply

Your part is very interesting.  I'm not sure what I think about the "real" part re: the mirror.

posted by TAPS. on June 30, 2010 at 10:19 AM | link to this | reply

The pastor sure knew how to defuse a situation! I could use him with a few bad customers...The ending here is one that I find to be haunting.

posted by FormerStudentIntern on June 30, 2010 at 9:49 AM | link to this | reply

Re: Ok, but I still don't understand why the mirror broke.
ummmm Pat love it was the Mirror who imaged the brutal death of a tortured soul.... Strange un expainable things can happen when mirrors are present.

posted by Kabu on June 30, 2010 at 9:48 AM | link to this | reply

Ok, but I still don't understand why the mirror broke.

posted by Pat_B on June 30, 2010 at 9:32 AM | link to this | reply

Wow! Well done!

posted by strat on June 30, 2010 at 9:23 AM | link to this | reply