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I just read the whole story again, from the first post , and I loved
it. You can easily develop it into a book.
and yes childhood is a gift for the develping psyche. It is the strongest influence on who we are to become. :)
posted by
Tzippy
on July 1, 2010 at 7:20 AM
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what great fun it is to read a good story from an author you know and love
you have talent and skill to write a thriller and a story that will keep you captivated.
posted by
Tzippy
on July 1, 2010 at 7:05 AM
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On my second read, I have concluded you have an unusual skill at mystery writing. I am sure all these characters are real and can visualize them all to some degree, even though they are only based on reality. Well done.
posted by
mariss9
on July 1, 2010 at 6:04 AM
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Wow, Kabu! Great story!! The mirror was there to witness the man agonize alone and suffer all those years for what had happened to his life, and also there to watch "one person who knows. He scares me." finally do him in. Loved it!
So sorry to hear about your friend in Australia. Sending you a big, warm hug of support.
posted by
adnohr
on June 30, 2010 at 11:13 PM
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A great suspense-thriller very well told!
posted by
shamasehar
on June 30, 2010 at 10:34 PM
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Kabu
What a great stryteller yoy are. Admirable, and soabsorbing. Keep writing, all of us are waiting for more
posted by
anib
on June 30, 2010 at 8:41 PM
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end of mystery
great story..who had he become? /LB
posted by
MsJudy
on June 30, 2010 at 8:33 PM
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who had he become?
posted by
Lanetay
on June 30, 2010 at 8:12 PM
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Excellently written Kabu.
posted by
shobana
on June 30, 2010 at 7:36 PM
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Kabuiepie-;)
And here all these months I thought you were sleeping beside me, HAH!!! You're dreamin' up the best darn stories that's what you're doin', you don't sleep. FANTASTIC!!!! and of course I love you darlin'.
posted by
WileyJohn
on June 30, 2010 at 7:09 PM
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Well done, Kabu!
posted by
teddypoet_TheGoodByeFade
on June 30, 2010 at 6:19 PM
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Kabu
A great story! And, as others have suggested - might there be more where that came from?
posted by
Nautikos
on June 30, 2010 at 6:16 PM
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so very good
Will there be more? Rosie says hi.
posted by
skye08
on June 30, 2010 at 5:57 PM
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very well done, Kabu, and you've left the door open for a sequel
if you feel to add one, or just continue this story with a Part Two....I agree with what's been commented on regarding the mirror - you could really go further with it, if you want to.
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posted by
Rumor
on June 30, 2010 at 1:32 PM
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It is always difficult to call it a day Kabu, it was a good story, but I shouldn't think you feel like writing much with Wiley being under the weather. It is such a shame he was making such a good job of the veranda. He is a professional not many about these days, look after yourselves.
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posted by
C_C_T
on June 30, 2010 at 12:35 PM
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Wow... xoxoxo
posted by
Sinome
on June 30, 2010 at 11:59 AM
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Spellbinding!
posted by
Nita09
on June 30, 2010 at 11:57 AM
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How terrible for the man to feel he had to maintain his silence all those years. But who would have believed him? An excellent, thought-provoking story.
posted by
mariss9
on June 30, 2010 at 11:50 AM
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Highly intriguing and well done, Dear Kabu!
I do agree with Pat on perhaps adding more details about the mirror; I was wondering about it in an earlier post. A good, quality read - Kudos!
posted by
Katray2
on June 30, 2010 at 11:24 AM
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Oooohhhh...don't leave us here, Grandmummy! Please???!!! You have
posted by
lovelyladymonk
on June 30, 2010 at 11:09 AM
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Kabu, I've gone through and read it again....
It is so creepy and cool. My only suggestion, when you get around to editing and sending to a magazine -- is to play up the mirror, make it more central to the story. Maybe it was his wife's mirror, an heirloom or something they bought together on their honeymoon. Maybe it has a lovely carved gilt frame, witnessed their parting scene when he was packing to leave, etc., etc. It knows he was spying, and who gave him the hush money. Woman, you sure have a gift for setting the reader's imagination free!
posted by
Pat_B
on June 30, 2010 at 10:31 AM
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Your part is very interesting. I'm not sure what I think about the "real" part re: the mirror.
posted by
TAPS.
on June 30, 2010 at 10:19 AM
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The pastor sure knew how to defuse a situation! I could use him with a few bad customers...The ending here is one that I find to be haunting.
posted by
FormerStudentIntern
on June 30, 2010 at 9:49 AM
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Re: Ok, but I still don't understand why the mirror broke.
ummmm Pat love it was the Mirror who imaged the brutal death of a tortured soul.... Strange un expainable things can happen when mirrors are present.
posted by
Kabu
on June 30, 2010 at 9:48 AM
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Ok, but I still don't understand why the mirror broke.
posted by
Pat_B
on June 30, 2010 at 9:32 AM
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Wow! Well done!
posted by
strat
on June 30, 2010 at 9:23 AM
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