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very interesting story
posted by
Lanetay
on October 19, 2009 at 9:15 AM
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Business as usual
Elinjo,
By now, you have heard how much everyone loves this story, and that we all can see what a talented writer you are, so I won't bother saying it again. You have struck a chord among many readers, obviously. Very well done!
I have been taken for granted, undervalued, devalued, underestimated, and overlooked as unimportant, by people MANY times during my lifetime, (usually, by the women in my life) as happened to your fictitional heroine. I often make no effort to disabuse these people of such a conclusion. When another person has contempt for, or indifference to us, they show us their true face. If this other person wants something from us, they wear a false mask.
It is frustrating to be nearly invisible to, and of no further use, to someone that we care about, but it is better to know their mindset, accept this, and move on, without a backward glance.
Guy
posted by
northsage_45
on October 19, 2009 at 3:54 AM
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Elinjo
A fun story with an unusual twist...
posted by
Nautikos
on October 17, 2009 at 7:16 PM
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Elinjo
I haven't read the entire story but I've read tonight and obviously you're an accomplished writer. Sometimes some stories just aren't my cup of tea, I'm more of a Grisham reader, but you sure have a talent for fiction and I can't do that.
posted by
WileyJohn
on October 16, 2009 at 6:30 PM
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A very fun ride this story was. So much tension with the characters!
posted by
FormerStudentIntern
on October 16, 2009 at 5:29 PM
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Re: I like this story on so many levels. Pat B.
The trouble is that many women do not achieve this kind of self confidence until they are quite old. Thanks for taking the following this. Now let me see whether my book group is more helpful than your's was. Three of them are published authors several times over, so they are pretty daunting. Have a nice weekend.
posted by
elinjo
on October 16, 2009 at 12:07 PM
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I like this story on so many levels.
Strong women protagonists are so appealing to me. I love the "little engine that could" attitude, and women who come right out and say what they mean, instead of giving hints and avoiding confrontation, are especially fun. I like that your grandmother didn't seek out a confrontation with her daughter, but when she was faced with it she didn't back down. Very satisfying story.
posted by
Pat_B
on October 16, 2009 at 12:00 PM
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Re: I became enthralled, if you substitute the female Lover for my Wiley
Yes, you're right Kabu. I deliberately chose a female lover, because I wanted 'a worst possible scenario'. The story's finished. Thanks for your kind feedback.
posted by
elinjo
on October 16, 2009 at 11:14 AM
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I became enthralled, if you substitute the female Lover for my Wiley
this could be my story. You are writing it so well the dialogue is fantastic. well done.
posted by
Kabu
on October 16, 2009 at 9:49 AM
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Betty, you've brought the scene to life, and your insights and depiction of human nature are fantastic. Thanks for a great story. Thanks too for your comment and wishes; I had inadvertently made a mistake in saying 13; just corrected it to 14 diyas and greens of the spinach family---some of those do not have equivalent English names! Have a good weekend! Nita.
posted by
Nita09
on October 16, 2009 at 8:23 AM
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Betty
As always the dialogue was spot on. I could feel the conflict between mother and daughter as well as the conflict between grandmother and grandson. Excellent, story and I look forward to more, Kudos.
Ian
posted by
Hackthorne19
on October 16, 2009 at 7:45 AM
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Re: final wave
Well, they had nothing in common. Better to part company. I'm going to present this at my writing-group next week.Thanks for following my story Shelly. I hope you are migraine-free at present.
posted by
elinjo
on October 16, 2009 at 5:22 AM
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Oh my goodness! How final a wave and then walked away! So unfortunate when a compromise cannot be reached! I think there was not much to begin with, or maybe it's the influence of the times! Shelly 
posted by
sam444
on October 16, 2009 at 4:51 AM
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