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Justi
This is totally gripping! You have a masterful way of conveying this woman's pain in small strokes of the brush, without grandiloquence, which makes it all very real...
posted by
Nautikos
on January 23, 2009 at 4:40 AM
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Kolekshuns
Thanks for the nice comment.
posted by
Justi
on January 22, 2009 at 11:56 PM
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NaatureSprit23
Thank you so very much. I was afraid you would not tell me; you do know without a doubt what the problems are with it. Thank you so much for all your help. Thank you so much. ILU2
posted by
Justi
on January 22, 2009 at 11:56 PM
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Well Done
Definitely a good job.
posted by
Kolekshuns
on January 22, 2009 at 11:22 PM
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You didn't ask me the pathos question, but I'll tell you anyway.
I don't think it's too much. You did a beautiful job with the pathos of it, as you put it. Leave that part alone. Have confidence in your writing. Your word choice and imagery are excellent. ILY
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NatureSpirit23
on January 22, 2009 at 9:59 PM
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Wiley
I will ask you the same question I did of Kabu. Was it too sad? Is there enough or rather too much pathos? I have been internalizing a lot of it. It is meltdown sometimes. George sends his love to both of you too.
posted by
Justi
on January 22, 2009 at 9:29 PM
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Kabu
Thank you for your kind comment. I don't know how anyone would handle this without some melt downs, do you? Is it too sad, too much pathos in it? I love your reading it daily. Thanks.
posted by
Justi
on January 22, 2009 at 9:27 PM
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Justi
Well written and extremely sad. You're dialogue over Arley is gripping. You really know how to draw us in luv, good for you. Much love to you and George from Us,
posted by
WileyJohn
on January 22, 2009 at 6:28 PM
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this is very sad and very human.
posted by
Kabu
on January 22, 2009 at 6:18 PM
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NatureSpirit23
Thank you for the kind comment. Yes it is a tragic story, it sorta keeps writing itself. I am missing your poetry too. ILU
posted by
Justi
on January 22, 2009 at 2:56 PM
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Vivid and real and tragic.
Good job. You've captured it all too clearly. I especially liked the part about rinsing the mouth so much that it felt like needle-pricks.
posted by
NatureSpirit23
on January 22, 2009 at 2:32 PM
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Re: TAPS
Thank you so very much. I do appreciate your reading my work.
posted by
Justi
on January 22, 2009 at 1:45 PM
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Another captivating chapter.
posted by
TAPS.
on January 22, 2009 at 12:34 PM
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