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Thanks, food4thought
I'm pleased you liked it. I think I should have been posting these things here, or in my Journal blog all along. I never got this kind of feedback while dabbling in Fiction.
posted by
notapoet
on July 11, 2007 at 7:57 PM
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Well done...
There is a sense of reality there that is hard to capture.
posted by
food4thought
on July 11, 2007 at 7:25 PM
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Antonionioni, Irish3, afzal50
Thanks y'all. I'm pleased as punch to finally get some response on one of these pieces. I probably should have been posting them here right along.
posted by
notapoet
on July 11, 2007 at 7:05 PM
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Hi Notapoet - it's very good for a quick piece of writing.
It's very clear and lucid, very well-imagined.
posted by
Antonionioni
on July 10, 2007 at 1:24 PM
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Notapoet, For what my thoughts
are worth.....I liked it....it has strong possibilities, there is definite conflict and desire, the attraction is still there between both of them. She wouldn't have acknowledged him if she didn't still admire him. Go forward with it, your description was great, and the conversations strong.....I would read more sure.....just write it. Irish
posted by
Irish3
on July 10, 2007 at 5:09 AM
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WEll expressed !
posted by
afzal50
on July 10, 2007 at 12:28 AM
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