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smartdog
Yes, I'm well thank you. Just resting.
posted by
mneme
on May 4, 2007 at 5:28 AM
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Ypunday
Here I am..
That's a really nice picture - thanks for the thought.
posted by
mneme
on May 4, 2007 at 5:27 AM
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Transcendental Child
thank you, I'm glad you liked it.
posted by
mneme
on May 4, 2007 at 5:26 AM
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littlemspickles
thank you for visiting, i'm glad you liked it.
posted by
mneme
on May 4, 2007 at 5:23 AM
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Hope you are well mneme
posted by
smartdog_670
on May 1, 2007 at 4:43 PM
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come back to us Mneme. shalom on MayDay
posted by
ILLUMINATI8
on May 1, 2007 at 6:08 AM
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Awesome imagery
just awesome.
posted by
Transcendental_Child
on April 30, 2007 at 2:17 AM
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I like the way you described the colours...
storm-blue grey-green waves
posted by
littlemspickles
on April 28, 2007 at 1:49 PM
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Wiley
Thank you, and for the rose:) Don't worry too much about rules at first, just look into your heart and write what comes along.. then play with it a little.. have fun..! Haiku are partly just an arrangement of syllables, in three lines - 5, 7, 5. There are other rules but I'm not too familiar with them.
posted by
mneme
on April 25, 2007 at 6:40 PM
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smartdog
Thank you - I hadn't thought of 'elegant' in connection with these but it's a nice comment. My 3rd one partly, and only a little bit accidentally, recalls one of Spenser's sonnets (Amoretti, 75) where the tide washes away the lady's name. Different agenda, in his speaker's case.
windblown whitetip waves
love inscribed in sand erased
cool quickening tide
compared with:
SONNET. LXXV.
ONE day I wrote her name vpon the strand,
but came the waues and washed it away:
agayne I wrote it with a second hand,
but came the tyde, and made my paynes his pray.
Vayne man, sayd she, that doest in vaine assay,
a mortall thing so to immortalize.
for I my selue shall lyke to this decay,
and eek my name bee wyped out lykewize.
Not so, (quod I) let baser things deuize,
to dy in dust, but you shall liue by fame:
my verse your vertues rare shall eternize,
and in the heuens wryte your glorious name.
Where whenas death shall all the world subdew,
our loue shall liue, and later life renew.
posted by
mneme
on April 25, 2007 at 6:34 PM
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richinstore
thank you, and for visiting - and for the rose.
posted by
mneme
on April 25, 2007 at 6:15 PM
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afzal50
thank you, and thanks for visiting.
posted by
mneme
on April 25, 2007 at 6:15 PM
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Maggie Mae
I'm glad you like this, and thank you for the compliment.
posted by
mneme
on April 25, 2007 at 6:14 PM
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Taps
I'm happy you liked this and made you want to take pictures.. I always loved reading your poetry, you're very good.
posted by
mneme
on April 25, 2007 at 6:13 PM
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tonyzonit
thankyou for your thoughts.. and I can tell you, the speaker was feeling pretty empty too... I am growing to like this form very much, it allows you to condense a feeling, an image or a thought into just a few words.
posted by
mneme
on April 25, 2007 at 6:11 PM
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Mneme
Well done luv, even if I don't understand all the rules that go into being able to write Haiku or any poetry really.
posted by
WileyJohn
on April 24, 2007 at 5:24 PM
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mneme
These are very elegant. The third I liked best.
Be well,
-samrtdog
posted by
smartdog_670
on April 24, 2007 at 12:54 PM
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mneme
nice poem
posted by
richinstore
on April 23, 2007 at 9:23 PM
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WEll expressed .Nice poem.
posted by
afzal50
on April 23, 2007 at 5:37 PM
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mneme..........
This is very nice - I like it. You're very talented.
posted by
MaggieMae
on April 23, 2007 at 3:30 PM
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mneme
This is wonderful. I love water in all its forms but you have given special mind pictures with your words that make me want to go and see and take pictures once again.
posted by
TAPS.
on April 23, 2007 at 1:54 PM
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Hi Mneme - this sequence of haiku has the feel of the waves coming in
and then receding, leaving the reader with an empty feeling. The repeated rhythms also are like the repetitive sound of the waves. Very enjoyable.
posted by
Antonionioni
on April 23, 2007 at 7:41 AM
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