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posted by
star4sky5
on November 21, 2006 at 7:04 AM
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Hi Marie-Claire,
it doesn't have to have the stress on the second syllable of each foot, as far as I know and I'm sure not all of mine does. Tony might know more, or I could look it up. I count syllables as I go, on my fingers! It's quite challenging to stick to the rhyming scheme but you get the hang of it. Why not just try it and see what comes out?
posted by
mneme
on November 10, 2006 at 9:57 PM
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posted by
star4sky5
on November 10, 2006 at 9:29 PM
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Mneme, well done with your poem!
One day i might have a go at a sonnet, but I simple cannot hear the stresses and the scansion, because of my accent...It is clever to be able to do this.
posted by
marieclaire66
on November 10, 2006 at 6:47 PM
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hi johnmcnab
I'm wondering now what kind of point it was that could have been missed.. but don't give up the idea, poetry can be quite soothing even if it isn't very 'good' according to writing class standards. If I worried about that, I'd never write any.!
posted by
mneme
on November 10, 2006 at 5:51 PM
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mneme
It was, without doubt, a compliment, mneme. I didn't want to show my ignorance and compliment you on a poem I thought you'd written and then find out it was a classic poem. I don't think it was the (almost) iambic pentameter so much as the events you were describing in the poem that made it so familiar.
I tried poetry two years ago in a creative writing class, and thought I'd written a masterpiece until the lecturer pointed out that I had missed the whole point - and I had.
posted by
johnmacnab
on November 10, 2006 at 4:13 PM
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An "I am not here" comment to my blogit friends
I am going to miss my daily dose this evening.. a function in town and an overnight stay are keeping me away. (ooh, poetry..)
posted by
mneme
on November 9, 2006 at 9:42 PM
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Ypunday
what a beautiful image - thank you...!
posted by
mneme
on November 9, 2006 at 9:38 PM
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johnmcnab,
I'll take that as a compliment
Yes, it's mine; it's in the sonnet form, and the familiar and comfortable feel you mention may come from the meter - iambic pentameter (though not strictly!) I have to thank tonyzonit and then .dave. for making me want to have a go myself. Quite hard to do, but fun.
posted by
mneme
on November 9, 2006 at 9:38 PM
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posted by
ILLUMINATI8
on November 9, 2006 at 6:45 PM
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mneme
Pardon me for asking this, mneme, and please accept my apologies if I'm out of place, but - 'is this poem yours?'
It sounds so comforting and familiar, like the background ticking of a grandfather clock. Thank you.
posted by
johnmacnab
on November 9, 2006 at 5:26 AM
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Smartdog,
why am I not surprised that you got it? Thanks for your appreciation too - calling in at yours later.
posted by
mneme
on November 9, 2006 at 1:46 AM
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Taps,
always nice to see you dropping in, and I'm glad you liked it. I always enjoy reading yours too, and nice to see muser back... sort of anyway.
posted by
mneme
on November 9, 2006 at 1:44 AM
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Ypunday
what a nice thing to say. Thank you... I'm slowly getting back to my old self and the work has settled down a bit, I'll stop by yours later again.
posted by
mneme
on November 9, 2006 at 1:43 AM
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twisted mom
- thank you! You should try these...have a look at Tonyzonit.
posted by
mneme
on November 9, 2006 at 1:41 AM
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Marie-Claire,
I'm glad you liked this, I am practising the sonnet form. Feather pillows are a mixed blessing; comfortable, but hard to launder. Somehow foam pillows didn't quite set the mood.
I'll have to think of a wide-awake poem now.
posted by
mneme
on November 9, 2006 at 1:40 AM
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mneme
That feeling you describe on waking at the end - I know exactly what you mean. Fine poem as well.
Be well,
-smartdog
posted by
smartdog_670
on November 8, 2006 at 1:38 PM
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This is beautiful, mneme. Its good to be reading your lovely poems again. Thanks for reading me while I was absent.
posted by
TAPS.
on November 7, 2006 at 4:06 PM
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It's all good.Often solitary confinement/hostage-ment allow clarity/truths
I'll take your wisdom and sharings from day or night. It is sad and close to Godliness to be so quit that one can hear one's heart beat clearly. Shalom Sister
posted by
ILLUMINATI8
on November 6, 2006 at 7:01 PM
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Wow...
posted by
twisted_mom
on November 6, 2006 at 3:34 AM
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the last verses I especially like. beautiful feeling of going to sleep
it is true that feather pillows make that funny rustling noise, i have one and it does do that.
posted by
marieclaire66
on November 5, 2006 at 11:28 PM
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Mneme, this is beautiful it exudes peace and serenity. well done!
posted by
marieclaire66
on November 5, 2006 at 11:26 PM
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