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Sounds like my day yesterday teaching middle school
posted by
poetjpb
on November 19, 2005 at 3:08 PM
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Meringue
Thank you for your comment. Very flattering, as usual!
I haven't seen you around much lately. How are things going with you?
posted by
ariel70
on November 19, 2005 at 6:46 AM
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Nice story with a twist at the end. Good job!
posted by
SilverMoon7
on November 18, 2005 at 5:24 AM
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| Nice writing, El Tel. 'Snaggle-toothed' et al. Some fine choices. Sort of a cross between Miss Jean Brodie and The Texas Chainsaw Massacre. With some Dickensian whimsy and desolation thrown in. I'll read it to my nephews next bedtime. |
| A Postcard by Dave  Delivered by Dave |
posted by
_dave_says_ack_
on November 18, 2005 at 1:51 AM
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Ariel
I really like your style......this is great. I love a story that throws you for a loop and this did!!
posted by
TIMMYTALES
on November 17, 2005 at 10:16 PM
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Great twist!
You are writing to your usual great quality :))!
posted by
Meringue
on November 17, 2005 at 7:27 PM
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I did not exspect that ending! This is wonderfully written and it gave me the shivers. Wow! 
posted by
BrightIrish
on November 17, 2005 at 7:07 PM
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Good grief, Ariel70. Now that's a story. I'm glad I wasn't watching a movie. My mind does a much better job of picturing what you described. Good writing job.
posted by
TAPS.
on November 17, 2005 at 4:38 PM
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Word
Ha! Ha! Caught ya!
Glad you liked it. Guess I should have posted it at Halloween.
Er.... not sure about a sequel tho'. With Alfie as the hero. Can you suggest a heroine???? LOL
posted by
ariel70
on November 17, 2005 at 1:40 PM
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Oh my goodness!
I didn't see that end coming. The descriptions were quite vivid, especially the one of Alfie. I enjoyed this thoroughly. It is well-written. That Alfie is a horror.
posted by
word.smith
on November 17, 2005 at 1:35 PM
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