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Dear, dear Kabu, I don't know how you "know" when I'm about to give up the poetic ghost, but you do. I've got me a wee bit too much o' the land of Eire fer ta be a writin'. Succinct t'ain't me strong point. You're so sweet, and I do appreciate it so much.
posted by
Sea_Gypsy
on March 24, 2017 at 7:00 PM
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Re: Re: Re: Re: Kabu
and that my darling is You.
posted by
Kabu
on March 24, 2017 at 5:04 PM
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Re: Re: Re: Kabu
Yes, it does make perfect sense, S.Sister. Poets who can do that are truly gifted!
posted by
Sea_Gypsy
on March 23, 2017 at 11:58 PM
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Re: sam444
Well, it's gotta stop someplace... LOL. As you probably could tell, it was done intentionally in the first part. Thanks, sam. 
posted by
Sea_Gypsy
on March 23, 2017 at 9:40 PM
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Magnificent! I felt like this one could have an infinite number of stanzes! Well done, indeed! sam
posted by
sam444
on March 23, 2017 at 7:57 PM
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Re: Lanetay
tes, so it seems.
posted by
Sea_Gypsy
on March 23, 2017 at 4:51 PM
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Re: Re: Kabu
For me in poetry less is more. I don't mean poem lengh but wordiness. if that makes sense.
posted by
Kabu
on March 23, 2017 at 4:15 PM
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Re: WileyJohn
I'm glad you thought so, Wiley. Thank you.
posted by
Sea_Gypsy
on March 23, 2017 at 2:44 PM
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Re: Kabu
Dear Kabu, I am glad you did enjoy them. One part is long and intentionally verbose, then the poem becomes shorter, harsher in tone. The two parts are separate, yet connected in that they both are Poem and Poet speaking. Must we decorate our words to the point of almost labored exaggeration in order for them to become poetry, and what of the opposite? Thank you immensely.
posted by
Sea_Gypsy
on March 23, 2017 at 2:44 PM
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Re: BC-A
As is often the case. Thank you, Bill.
posted by
Sea_Gypsy
on March 23, 2017 at 2:28 PM
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Re: FSI
Yes, contrast is a point here. Not so much optimism and pessimism but beneath that; deceptiveness and truth, gaudy colors or stark black and white. Neither is exactly right nor wrong...
posted by
Sea_Gypsy
on March 23, 2017 at 2:27 PM
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Re: Annicita
Glad you did like it, or them... We are what we are, is partly what this says.
posted by
Sea_Gypsy
on March 23, 2017 at 2:23 PM
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Re: chuck_ibrahim
Gee, thanks very much, Chuck. You understood it. I'm so pleased.
posted by
Sea_Gypsy
on March 23, 2017 at 2:21 PM
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Re: C_C_T
Great point, CC! What's a tender half-truth worth? Love it!
posted by
Sea_Gypsy
on March 23, 2017 at 2:20 PM
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Re: -blackcat
Thanks, -blackcat.
posted by
Sea_Gypsy
on March 23, 2017 at 2:19 PM
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from diamonds to coal
posted by
Lanetay
on March 23, 2017 at 11:13 AM
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RPresta
Interesting mix of words in both.
posted by
WileyJohn
on March 22, 2017 at 1:01 PM
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I cannot compare bewtween the two, they both delight my senses sweet S. Sister.
posted by
Kabu
on March 22, 2017 at 12:33 PM
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The narrator can be touched through the lines.
posted by
BC-A
on March 22, 2017 at 9:55 AM
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The contrast between both parts is what strikes me most. So optimistic at the beginning with the pessimism in the end part.
posted by
FormerStudentIntern
on March 22, 2017 at 9:13 AM
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I love both of them...wonderful usage of words about words and their impact
posted by
Annicita
on March 22, 2017 at 8:44 AM
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very powerful poem. I love how you play with the words
posted by
Chuck_E_Ibrahim
on March 22, 2017 at 8:41 AM
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If I were a young man , I would go for the second option. 'I hope'
This is good poetry, to write as such one must of course
neutralize ones inhibitions. One speak half truths
with tenderness, which is good as it has to
be assimilated into the varied other options that
race to please the reader's senses. Well of course I like it.
posted by
C_C_T
on March 22, 2017 at 7:08 AM
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posted by
-blackcat
on March 22, 2017 at 7:02 AM
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Re: TAPS
Thank you very much, TAPS! This developed into a study of comparison and contrast in a way. I'm glad you liked it. Your comment is exactly what I hoped one would feel after reading the entire piece. Hope you're feeling better.
posted by
Sea_Gypsy
on March 21, 2017 at 10:53 PM
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Your poems are so special. I enjoyed reading the second part again after reading the first.
posted by
TAPS.
on March 21, 2017 at 10:20 PM
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