Comments on The Innocent Bystander

Go to The Words Of Pain and Sadness of PegesusAdd a commentGo to The Innocent Bystander

Re: WELCOME aboard poet! Pian is a good source of poetry. Suggestions:
thank you for your words laydi daydi, but i am who i am, there is no shame in bi polar, nor is there pride, it just is.  people do not need to fear the unknown they need to know it, so i write about life which includes bi polar and alzheimers and life itself.  the style i use is also used by the poet e e cummins. i am aware of the english language and how to use it. poetry is of a unique style all its own, everyone has their own way of doing things that suit them.  i appreciate you welcoming me, that was very nice of you. ~ peg

posted by 1pegesus4u on November 26, 2007 at 10:48 PM | link to this | reply

WELCOME aboard poet! Pian is a good source of poetry. Suggestions:

1. I love your refrain....but I would leave out the words "Of bipolar", and let the rest of the poem speak for it. Best, not to say it like in an essay or novel, I think....

2. Some careful edits "your" might often be "you're" if the cotraction meant is "you are."

Welcome again; this place needs serious and working poets (my own poems are works-in-progress, so I am a working poet!) Shalom/peace (PS> I took care of my mother for 6 months when she had terminal cancer, and I can relate only a bot. Alzheimer's is one of the creullest...having htem and NOT HAVING them at the same time). Peace-shanthi-amen!

posted by ILLUMINATI8 on November 26, 2007 at 10:25 AM | link to this | reply

Re:
why do you suspect your friend is bi polar? if you do not want to discuss it here send me an e-mail .  .  .  .  pegesus_unicorn@yahoo.com and tell me what makes you suspect bi polar ~peg

posted by 1pegesus4u on November 25, 2007 at 10:43 PM | link to this | reply

AWARENESS

I pray every day for the bipolar people , because I suspect one of my best friend is bipolar....it really hurts to know it...but not sure

posted by star4sky5 on November 25, 2007 at 3:11 PM | link to this | reply

it was so awesome you send the pearls and flowers, thank you so much

ms. Peggy, it is very nice of you......you are awesome......with love and care,

Sue

posted by star4sky5 on November 23, 2007 at 8:40 AM | link to this | reply

We are truly kindred spirits
I too am the daughter of a military man.The last decade before he died he also suffured from alshiemers and I have experienced severe menopausal symptomes coupled with post tramatic stress.There is nothing more frightening than watching yourself lose your own mind and having no control,much less watching one of the people you love most in life slip away as well.

posted by butterflybeebs on November 23, 2007 at 5:45 AM | link to this | reply

I DEAL WITH FOUR BRAIN DIESES MYSELF, FORTUNATELY NONE ARE LIFE THREATENING AND NOT SEVERE SUCH AS BIPOLAR. ANY DISEASE OF THE BRAIN IS TOUGH TO DEAL WITH!!    SAM

posted by sam444 on November 23, 2007 at 12:46 AM | link to this | reply