Marineair's Musings for Saturday, June 28, 2008

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Saturday, June 28, 2008

The Limited Ones (Final)

Bloodshot eyes watch a cynical world Through the bright noise of a screen Their view of perfection tainted By the frames of the sick and twisted Drawn in and intoxicated, the masses are teeming forward Life by design insanity is happening across the board The world sacrificed for sale, an altar... Sign in to see full entry.

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Development of a Poem: The Limited Ones (Part IV)

Later that same afternoon (I told you it was coming to a close), I finally figured out the problem I was having with the pacing. I combined the stanzas, making every two stanzas one. This fit better with some of the original lines, and forced the reader to slow down in their own head. I was... Sign in to see full entry.

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Development of a Poem: The Limited Ones (Part III)

A little over a week later, I came back to my work in progress. I had some down time during a drill at work, so I kept rereading the stanzas over and over. Where there seemed to be a hiccup in the rhythm, I just pretended it was the end of the piece so far and let my mind fill in the blanks. The... Sign in to see full entry.

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