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This is a really good beginning to a story. I can just imagine where this is going. I'm thinking this couple is in dangerous territory. They obviously have no clue but something is definitely wrong. Great writing!
posted by
Goldiec
on October 29, 2020 at 3:23 AM
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It's a nice story. Will you continue it?
posted by
Annicita
on October 28, 2020 at 3:38 PM
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I think this stands alone as a story to make one think about a lot of things.
posted by
TAPS.
on October 28, 2020 at 1:44 PM
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I think this stands alone as a story to make one think about a lot of things.
posted by
TAPS.
on October 28, 2020 at 1:44 PM
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A really intriguing start, some one is rather suspicious
posted by
C_C_T
on October 28, 2020 at 11:24 AM
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Sassy, why don't you take it to the next step?
Take us back to Zane's other life, (or Dorrie's). Or tell us who the mysterious swimmer was, what they were up to.
posted by
Pat_B
on October 28, 2020 at 8:54 AM
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You left this story with an interesting twist of intrigue.
The fact that they meet up each year reminded me of a movie that I watched many years ago. Same Time, Next Year, starring Alan Alda. 1978. Maybe they are married to others, and the diver is a PIU hired by one of their jealous spouses. I can't wait to see where you go with this.
posted by
Sherri_G
on October 28, 2020 at 8:16 AM
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