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Re: shamasehar
Yes, they can be. Thank you for the kind thoughts. 
posted by
Sea_Gypsy
on August 9, 2016 at 2:29 AM
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Re: TAPS
Thank you, and may I say the same to you?
posted by
Sea_Gypsy
on August 9, 2016 at 2:26 AM
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Words can be powerful tools and your poignant poem certainly has that magic to stir emotions.
posted by
shamasehar
on August 8, 2016 at 9:58 PM
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Great-both original and revised and reposted and shared comments of yours and of everyone who read you and commented. I'm so glad you are here on a regular basis.
posted by
TAPS.
on August 8, 2016 at 9:19 PM
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Re: Katray2
The full story truly is terrible. I am saddened and sickened for her. Thank you.
posted by
Sea_Gypsy
on August 8, 2016 at 12:47 PM
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Re: BC-A
Thank you. I try. I feel it's like standing next to a billionare who's writing a fat check, while I throw my penny into a Salvation Army bucket. 
posted by
Sea_Gypsy
on August 8, 2016 at 12:46 PM
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Beautifully heartfelt, both versions, RPresta..
What a terrible tragedy; my thoughts and prayers for the young lady..
posted by
Katray2
on August 8, 2016 at 11:12 AM
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The poem's your gift. It'll help collect lives together.
posted by
BC-A
on August 8, 2016 at 9:40 AM
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Re: Nautikos
Thank you, Naut, so much for your kind words. She will know how much the people here in Blogitsville wish her well.
posted by
Sea_Gypsy
on August 7, 2016 at 9:21 PM
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RP
The first version was wonderful and so is this one! And my heart and best wishes go out to that young lady, in the hope she will fully overcome the pain of that terrible experience...
posted by
Nautikos
on August 7, 2016 at 5:21 PM
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Re: WileyJohn
fANTASTIC! Thank you for writing! Yes, a special kind of disgust, repulsion and revulsion for such a person is deserved, and reserved for this type of evil. Well done, Wiley. I can feel your justified outrage! We all feel that. 
posted by
Sea_Gypsy
on August 7, 2016 at 4:07 PM
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Re: Lanetay
So true, Lanetay. So true. Not enough of that.
posted by
Sea_Gypsy
on August 7, 2016 at 3:55 PM
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Re: Kabu
Oh, so true, Kabu! As women we can say that more readily and with relative ease, albeit laced heavily with something close to anger, perhaps rage. As a teen victim, this girl must stand as tall as a woman and fight a fight that shouldn't be, for her rights and respect, which also shouldn't be and that must take twice the strength. I had already conveyed everything you said, and more, to the family. Yes, whose heart could not go out this dear girl? Thank you for your comment and compliment, also. It's very much appreciated.
posted by
Sea_Gypsy
on August 7, 2016 at 3:54 PM
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Re: C_C_T
Thanks, CC. I'm in agreement with you. It's only a token. Therapists, support groups, family and time may help. Thank you for your compliment.
posted by
Sea_Gypsy
on August 7, 2016 at 3:44 PM
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Re: FSI
Thanks, glad you like them, and also the story.
posted by
Sea_Gypsy
on August 7, 2016 at 3:40 PM
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Sea_Gypsy
on August 7, 2016 at 3:40 PM
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Re: Aba
Thank you very much. It's nice that they liked it. Succor is not always attainable but we try.
posted by
Sea_Gypsy
on August 7, 2016 at 3:39 PM
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R Presta
Your poem was such a gift for women, my male translation was simple hate for the kind of man that rapes.
A Mans viewpoint!!!!
sip sweet the vile potion
of this Hateful Cup I force
your former gentle thoughts
wrapped in drops of black hatred
drink full my gift of vile pain to instill pain
within your assaulted spirit's splendor
savor long the radiant hate
beating in your angel heart
heal slowly hurts both raw and deep
as no solace reaches past your soul
then
sip again the vile potion succor
of my Hateful Cup tonight.
Thank you for writing.
posted by
WileyJohn
on August 7, 2016 at 3:01 PM
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what everyone needs loving kindness
posted by
Lanetay
on August 7, 2016 at 11:07 AM
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when it happens to a Sisiter it happens to us all. Again women stand up for what ids our right. We have the right to meet friends and socialize without the fear of something being dropped int our drink. We have the right to walk the streets and byways. We have the right to feel safe in our home and communities. Rape is Never our fault and we always have the right to say No. he can come in his pants if he can't stop.
Wonderful rewrite of your poem dear and my heart goes out to that little girl.
posted by
Kabu
on August 7, 2016 at 9:27 AM
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Well Presta I don't know if anything could soothe the brutality of such an ordeal.
Hopefully in the recovery process words that you have poured from your heart could help to gently comfort someone who has suffered so. What else is there only time and love.
How nice to have achieved something with your beautiful poem.
posted by
C_C_T
on August 7, 2016 at 7:47 AM
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I like both versions a whole lot. An interesting backstory to the poem.
posted by
FormerStudentIntern
on August 7, 2016 at 6:29 AM
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(became). I read this slowly savouring its flavor.
posted by
anib
on August 7, 2016 at 3:49 AM
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Indeed, the power of a few words. Each sip (word) tastes sweet like honey, providing succour to the violated souls, Presta dear, of the loving Cup of your offering! This is a fabulous poem so filled also with your artistic taste. 
... No wonder, it baca me the gruop's pick.
posted by
anib
on August 7, 2016 at 3:45 AM
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