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beautiful, you really can paint pictures.....never heard of this mountain, but now it is famous to me.

posted by overtherainbow on July 24, 2015 at 10:46 AM | link to this | reply

Well you put the feel of it there V. Well done.

posted by C_C_T on July 21, 2015 at 11:07 AM | link to this | reply

Re: Thank you, Taps.

posted by Vermont01 on July 21, 2015 at 7:58 AM | link to this | reply

Re: Thank you, BC-A

posted by Vermont01 on July 21, 2015 at 7:58 AM | link to this | reply

Re: Thank you, Chuck.

posted by Vermont01 on July 21, 2015 at 7:57 AM | link to this | reply

Re: Thank you, Kabu.

posted by Vermont01 on July 21, 2015 at 7:57 AM | link to this | reply

Re: VT01

Krisles, thanks for the advise.

posted by Vermont01 on July 21, 2015 at 7:56 AM | link to this | reply

Re: Vt

Naut, thanks for the input. Yes, a failed creative attempt.

posted by Vermont01 on July 21, 2015 at 7:55 AM | link to this | reply

Re: FSI, thanks for visiting.

posted by Vermont01 on July 21, 2015 at 7:54 AM | link to this | reply

The stories the mountain could tell...

posted by FormerStudentIntern on July 21, 2015 at 5:19 AM | link to this | reply

Vt

I like the way you evoke the fateful power of the mountain...But there's a little thing that irritates me: It should be 'many a hiker has', or else 'many hikers have'...I know in poetry we have licence to explore creative new ways of using language, but bad grammar is not one of them...

posted by Nautikos on July 20, 2015 at 7:42 PM | link to this | reply

VT01

Another one I would like to see you hold onto and visit again someday.  I like this but would really like to see you expand on the feeling and mood behind it with less of the  clear descriptive wording.....and experiment more with atmosphere.  Like, I took word groupings I liked in it and easily made a haiku: Clouds that circle by...Its mood can change suddenly...It casts its shadow.  That was easy (not very good, but illustrative, I hope!) because you have the mood in here and I guess that's what I would like to see you expand on and expand this piece.  Just IMHO. :) emoticons not working!

posted by Krisles on July 20, 2015 at 7:20 PM | link to this | reply

Like Taps I like this too. We can think we are better than everyone else, tougher, bigger larger than life....Nothing like nature throwing all she has at us to bring us down, perhaps even take our life.

posted by Kabu on July 20, 2015 at 6:29 PM | link to this | reply

Good imagery describing the high mountains 

posted by Chuck_E_Ibrahim on July 20, 2015 at 4:30 PM | link to this | reply

🐝A great view of poetic imagery. BC-A, Bill’s R👀st

posted by BC-A on July 20, 2015 at 2:14 PM | link to this | reply

I like that--a lot.   I've seen a lot of mountains, climbed a few, seen the valley from way above the tree line.  I'm getting older.  Those mountains and valleys are old as the hills, but will remain forever young.

posted by TAPS. on July 20, 2015 at 1:00 PM | link to this | reply

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