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Is this going to take a Utopian or Dystopian path? I agree it should be serialized into more than one story.....
posted by
Corbin_Dallas
on April 25, 2015 at 5:08 PM
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It will be interesting to see what direction you go in.
posted by
FormerStudentIntern
on April 23, 2015 at 5:40 AM
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RE: COMMENTS AND SUGGESTIONS
Thank you kindly, dear friends....I have now copied all pages and also all comments and fully intend to go forward in some manner....so, to be continued, asap...in some form or the other....and, again, I so apologize for my clumsy beginning.
posted by
Krisles
on April 19, 2015 at 4:44 PM
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You have character sketches. I think with the complexity of this story you should divide it into 3 stories. One gives a lot of the background. Remember though to show not tell. Try to work a little of the background into each story. If you are not sure what I mean take a look at the Star Wars series. Each one gives us a little bit of the background at a time.
posted by
Annicita
on April 17, 2015 at 8:49 AM
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Re: CCT
My reward is fine considering I deserved the punishment, I know I was a bad, bad writer for doing such a thing.....and I appreciate your letting me touch the floor. I'd never last long enough to at least explain that I actually started out to see if I could discuss this particular philosophical question I was thinking about in a story, instead of a poem as I had thought I was going to....and I had an idea I started out with, never dreaming I would get so carried away with it, that it wold get so involved....it just wasn't as simple as I had, admittedly not thought, initially. And then, I kind of got involved with the whole thing and kept going, still with the initial question in my mind.....so I have always had a goal in mind it's just that I didn't stop and think realistically about what it wold take to resolve it and plunged recklessly in. I think I might actually go ahead and try to go ahead and write it....but I suppose it will be in sections....and I have read a lot of fantasies and would like mine to be more the kind that reveals itself in layers I think. Maybe I should move this blog to the Fiction section..... Oh, and your comments are always more than welcome not matter the content...I can't imagine that changing but if it does, you will be the first to know
posted by
Krisles
on April 16, 2015 at 6:49 PM
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Well K . I think you plunged us into this without thinking about the person who would read it. I think one has to gently ease the characters into the readers minds. Remember the start of a book needs the vital element of interest to encourage further reading.
This is only my opinion and I only read fantasy books usually because my brother vets them and I know they will be reasonable. I assume the main character is the lady who signs up for this adventure. It would be nice to know her history, and why she would do so also what kind of environment she has developed from, is this a futuristic time or way back when the Gods struggled to form alliances. Of course if it is just for your own amusement go ahead and be happy to be able to imagine such experiences. Sorry to be cruel, as a reward because you are chained to the wall I will let you touch the floor with your feet. Now shall I delete this? Did you like your reward?
posted by
C_C_T
on April 16, 2015 at 10:59 AM
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I like Naut's ideas. I often find, too, that when I write, things work themselves out during the writing process.
posted by
FormerStudentIntern
on April 16, 2015 at 5:39 AM
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Krisles
Okay, looking at it again, the Others can be 'bracketed', they are virtually gods. They might occasionally intervene after the fashion of the Greek gods...Might even engage in a bit of hanky panky...I shall give it more serious thought tomorrow... I've had my last sip of bourbon and shall sign off for the night...XOX...:)
posted by
Nautikos
on April 15, 2015 at 9:11 PM
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Krisles
Okay, looking at it again, the Others can be 'bracketed', they are virtually gods. They might occasionally intervene after the fashion of the Greek gods...Might even engage in a bit of hanky panky...I shall give it more serious thought tomorrow... I've had my last sip of bourbon and shall sign off for the night...XOX...:)
posted by
Nautikos
on April 15, 2015 at 9:11 PM
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Krisles
I'm typing this on my phone, so it's taking even longer than usual, LOL! Which is also why I shall write less than I would have otherwise...Actually, I had been wondering where this story was heading, and now it's clear you too were pondering that...But before I can make suggestions, I have to know a bit more...Are these Beings mortal? What's their lifespan? (I realize there are different kinds, so there might be different answers for each...) To what extent are their actions dictated by their environment(s)? I find it difficult to conceive of a world whose inhabitants are not subject to independent constraints, i.e. those not defined by the rules of whatever game... Just a few thoughts, since it's late and I'm on a phone writing rather than talking, LOL.....XOX....:)
posted by
Nautikos
on April 15, 2015 at 8:46 PM
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