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Your dialogue is the best! Puts us right in there!
posted by
adnohr
on April 3, 2015 at 3:20 AM
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It just plain reads authentic...lots of hard work and editing have happened ...well done our Pat.
posted by
Kabu
on April 2, 2015 at 10:11 AM
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I like the wording that you use throughout this story--lots of expressions that I heard during the years that I was growing up.
posted by
TAPS.
on April 2, 2015 at 10:01 AM
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PatB
Loved the thinking that went into the writing, like the tossed newspaper fluttering to the floor, and the use of the word 'Capiche' at the closure, well done love.
posted by
WileyJohn
on April 2, 2015 at 9:48 AM
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it's picking up speed
posted by
Annicita
on April 2, 2015 at 9:30 AM
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The story appears to be sorting itself out, Harm has got to keep him talking .Interesting flow of events, would not want to own that truck though.
posted by
C_C_T
on April 2, 2015 at 8:10 AM
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Pat
I'll definitely keep reading...
posted by
Nautikos
on April 2, 2015 at 6:23 AM
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