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I agree with Wiley with the confusion he talks about with the new characters and the kiss.
I'm not sure if 2 guys would call each other hon...
posted by
Annicita
on March 18, 2015 at 6:46 PM
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PatB
I printed this post out because I had trouble understanding a few things. Like first of all we have Joey and Clyde thinking of a ranch in Oregon, a rundown of their activities together where they are working so hard to portray themselves as 'straight', then all of a sudden we have a Clyde and Gus milking milking together. Then Aldo is another new name we have to get used to quickly.
Next, after reading of the efforts of Joey and Clyde to appear staight kinda, Joey grabs Clyde and plants a big kiss on him. Joey isn't thrilled like a lover he just wants to be turned loose from Clyde.
Gus Lansing sees them and in a short space of time Joey and Clyde are thinking of moving on. Well they don't seem that content at being permanently gay in public.
Maybe it's being straight doesn't make this story work for me, but the use of 'Hon' between the pair of them doesn't work at all here.
Finally it must be terrible pain that the boss didn't like 'catching them' because he wouldn't like his wife to see it.
posted by
WileyJohn
on March 18, 2015 at 12:47 PM
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I was confused
by the question, Is he ready? that seemed to be misunderstood between the two. I may need to reread to get how that worked.
posted by
Ciel
on March 18, 2015 at 11:15 AM
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The affectionate word Hon doesn't work for me. I have no idea what affectionate pet names two guys would use but Hon just doesn't gel with me. Otherwise, great.
posted by
Kabu
on March 18, 2015 at 10:13 AM
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Pat
It's really well written; but a big smooch like that in broad daylight does sound a bit strange, after the great care they've been taking all along...
posted by
Nautikos
on March 18, 2015 at 7:43 AM
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