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Re: Re: CCT, I like it!

Thank you Ciel.

posted by C_C_T on May 1, 2014 at 5:54 AM | link to this | reply

Re: CCT, I like it!

This is as magical and charming as is to be found in your other gardens. It reminds me of a collection of short stories by Italo Calvino, called COSMICOMICS.

posted by Ciel on May 1, 2014 at 5:52 AM | link to this | reply

Cup

I say we, because it seemed that there was more than me.

We must have been moving because sometimes it seemed

warmer and at other times quite cold.

I don't know how long the times lasted or why suddenly

it all seemed different.

It was hot, it felt as though we were moving through turbulence.

It changed suddenly we seemed to stop with strange jolt.

I heard a little cry, I had not heard a sound for what seemed

like forever.

I think I must have evolved at that point I tore through

a thick skin it had been protecting me. Something was

doing the same thing. We both lay dreamily and felt a new

kind of motion. We seemed to go one way and then

back again. Surprisingly my companion suddenly

spoke, it was in my mind. "Who are you?"

I replied in the same way.' I cannot remember,

it seems like we have been like this for ever.

The reply was muted, suddenly we moved faster

it seemed that we moved one way and then the other.

again as if were in the grip of a mighty force. Suddenly

we were thrown and crashed against some other

solid formation. I think the protective layers that

had protected us for decades must have worn through

and finally had been torn away .

We eventually realised that it was silent and then our shell

began to hum.

The little veins that were attached to my small body

began to shrivel I assumed that my companion was

feeling the same experience a pot of substance appeared

from a cavity in the side of our container.

We heard in our minds eat this now. My companion

was smaller than me. It grunted and began to eat,

I remember it was chewy and sweet and we sat and ate

until we could do no more.

Humming began, at first I did not notice , I was so

amazed a screen lit up and I knew I was looking at a world

It was yellow, but then a creature crawled into view

and words on the screen spoke, 'Crab very small specimen.'

Suddenly we were floating' (Sea) ' came from the screen.

'If in peril, press the blue button.' My companion did not wait

to consider if we were actually in danger. It pressed the button.

We soared over high walls of stone. ( private note my companion

seems a bit what might be called a little bossy boots.)

It was a green world we must have fallen into the sea for

how long I do not know, my companion says there are hidden secrets

in this sphere, we seem to travel by looking down at what we like

hovering and then gently moving on. We are very small compared

to most things but I did see a tiny person standing by a yellow cup

flower. Landing flashes. It seems we are descending into a soft

green patch.

The screen says green meadow.

posted by C_C_T on May 1, 2014 at 1:17 AM | link to this | reply

Re: Annicita,

One of the best exercises for a writer: keeping a story so tight and concise, that it can be told in 500 words or less.

My first attempt at such a thing was THE MONEY SHOT which is available here, actually, but has also been published. I worked that one very deliberately, to fit the numbers.