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Ah so nice to describe it this way...
posted by
Saif_AlKindi
on August 20, 2013 at 1:29 PM
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I like how in this poem you contrast what most feel to what you feel with the end of the day...
posted by
FormerStudentIntern
on August 20, 2013 at 9:33 AM
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UtahJay
Enjoyed that, and have difficulty at times understanding poetry. But this one, we have walked some of the long steps of recovery with much the same emotional needs.
posted by
WileyJohn
on August 19, 2013 at 6:45 PM
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Sometimes I like to find my own meaning in a poem, perhaps quite different to what the writer intended. Othertimes it is good to be helped with understanding.
This poem I could see beteween the lines the picture that you were portraying and I find it a wonderful piece. Thank you Jay.
posted by
Kabu
on August 19, 2013 at 5:20 PM
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Sometimes a poem is great because it makes us think...and wonder. I don't mind not understanding your poetry immediately. I think on it, then come back. Whether it is joy or pain, it is life, and you are very good at expressing both.
posted by
adnohr
on August 19, 2013 at 4:38 PM
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Re: There's a lot of wonderful intense imagery, but (if I understand
oops - I left out a word - That last sentence should end "... where the poem really starts."
posted by
2902
on August 19, 2013 at 2:27 PM
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There's a lot of wonderful intense imagery, but (if I understand
your injunction to us your fans) - and if I were fortunate enough to be the one who wrote it - I'd trim it to maybe a third the length to make the really good stuff stand out more vivdly. With my own poems, I usually start by lopping off the first stanza or two for starters. In my case, I'm usually surprised to find out the poem really starts.
posted by
2902
on August 19, 2013 at 2:01 PM
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Good topic, good senses, good time readin Jay. BC-A, Bill’s R®st
posted by
BC-A
on August 19, 2013 at 12:57 PM
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You often catch my imagination with the way you express things, and I get lost in my own thoughts for a time.
posted by
TAPS.
on August 19, 2013 at 12:32 PM
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You describe the flow of those days very well.
posted by
FormerStudentIntern
on August 19, 2013 at 10:53 AM
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