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I like it!
posted by
Ciel
on March 15, 2013 at 9:01 PM
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I wonder if this is a lady with loads of cash, she seems very professional. Nice start one has to intrigue quickly these days.
posted by
C_C_T
on March 15, 2013 at 1:30 AM
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PatB
Well it made me not want to go in a place like a seniors home smelling of urine.
posted by
WileyJohn
on March 14, 2013 at 7:13 PM
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Excellent!! Perfect surprise; there's elements of truth, of emotion, of present day probablility that make it all too real. KUDOS!
posted by
adnohr
on March 14, 2013 at 6:40 PM
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You completely hoodwincked me up until close to the end and even at that
the punch line was a surprise. Well done our Pat. well done.
posted by
Kabu
on March 14, 2013 at 3:05 PM
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Pat
LOL! Very well done - I had thought of Audrey as a young woman, and Jude as her boyfriend or husband; which made her response to the old woman, “Not yet...But I hope we can get acquainted soon” somehow strangely menacing...
posted by
Nautikos
on March 14, 2013 at 6:28 AM
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