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Re: It's kind of awkward and clunky, but, as you say, it has
a good heart. Even without the idiots who phone and text at the wheel, I think road manners and common sense have taken a decided turn for the worse.
posted by
2902
on September 10, 2012 at 8:50 AM
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It may not be a perfect haiku but the content is spot on - bravo!
posted by
lionreign
on September 10, 2012 at 3:06 AM
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Re: Thank you, Jay, but it's actually a kind of failed haiku -
I couldn't get it all in without cheating!
posted by
2902
on September 9, 2012 at 11:23 PM
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Re: I never heard of a naani - that's 5775? I used the form
once before to describe an incident at Yankee Stadium in which a "bleacher creature" grabbed the hat of a Red Sox fan, poured his beer into it, and then jammed it on his own head, shouting "Boston sucks"" Very classy.
But, "naani"? I've learned something. Thank you.
In that regard, if you haven't already done it, check out a trio of poems posted this last day or two by someone with a blog name POETIC POETRY or something like that. He has a "lantern" poem about the garden of Eden and two real ballad-stanza ballads about a house fly! He's very, very good!
posted by
2902
on September 9, 2012 at 11:20 PM
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isnt that more a naani?
posted by
Annicita
on September 9, 2012 at 8:55 PM
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I have heard of coining a word Bob, but a form...Well done.
posted by
UtahJay
on September 9, 2012 at 7:48 PM
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