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Throughout the whole poem, yes, I am deeply in love. I have found love and love has reached me. Thank you for sharing. Now, I will build my courage to embrace the love I found despite the pain, tears, and sorrow.
posted by
Eleanor_Jazz
on June 8, 2012 at 9:28 PM
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yes we never know when love will find us
posted by
Lanetay
on June 5, 2012 at 8:59 AM
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Dear lady that is so probing, declarative, yearning and accepting... Excellent work.
posted by
Justi
on June 4, 2012 at 9:56 PM
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Liked everything to stanza to stanza 5. Then you loosened the knot, and succumb to the next dramatic level, which is not where you began. Are there two poems, here?
I go thru these same things myself and wind up exactly where you are.
So, Hi.
But what if poetry were only about extracting excellence from ourselves.
That would only be half a reason to write.
The only other reason to write is because we want to. So why would form elude us? Maybe because it is so much a part of us, and that's why we seek it within the form of language.
Are we not born with this language of Inner Speak?
I'll meet you here, on stanza 5.
I just got to a place of my own, I could see where I was going, and the language was clear. But when I was going there, things changed around . I lost the insight, and a new ending appeared.
But I guess this is where I began....
posted by
jfm32
on June 4, 2012 at 6:59 PM
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Very lovely (and insightful). 
posted by
Troosha
on June 4, 2012 at 12:06 PM
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one of your best
posted by
Annicita
on June 4, 2012 at 11:00 AM
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shobana
e But to hope that love’s in the head of the other person love. BC-A, Bill’s R®st
posted by
BC-A
on June 4, 2012 at 10:37 AM
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great work dear one, very sensual. Well done.
posted by
Kabu
on June 4, 2012 at 9:18 AM
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Shobana
Love is always in the air as a fragrance lingers and we catch its smell. We feel its beauty and want more as we seek where did it come from as it stirrs our soul. Nice poem Shobana. Fememefeme
posted by
fememefeme
on June 4, 2012 at 9:12 AM
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It intrigues me just how love unfolds.
posted by
FormerStudentIntern
on June 4, 2012 at 8:54 AM
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Hi,Shobana it was great to see you here after a long break.I am fine & hope all is well at your end.A lovely poem.......
posted by
shamasehar
on June 4, 2012 at 7:46 AM
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WELL Shobana this is so seductive, I had to write a silly little poem in response. Fortunately I am immune from lascivious thoughts, but I think this might be a cure for rheumatics.
posted by
C_C_T
on June 4, 2012 at 7:35 AM
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shobana
How very enticing and sensual luv, well done.
posted by
WileyJohn
on June 4, 2012 at 5:22 AM
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This is a very well crafted poem that makes me wish I were young again. and desirable.
posted by
UtahJay
on June 3, 2012 at 10:39 PM
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