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CCT

I liked the first poem - it was funny! The Milkmaid? Another little master piece...And I can feel the war in the background when I read Ted 1940...

posted by Nautikos on May 8, 2012 at 8:06 PM | link to this | reply

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Hi Lion one for the sin bin keep your eyes peeled. I usually modify, Thank you

posted by C_C_T on May 7, 2012 at 7:06 AM | link to this | reply

Re: CCT

May day today Bill but I don't dance around the maypole any longer.

posted by C_C_T on May 7, 2012 at 6:59 AM | link to this | reply

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Thank you Justi, we had to sit and count the coupons because we sold sweets it used to take hours, one day Dad said, I am just going to guess them and he did from then on and no one ever noticed.

posted by C_C_T on May 7, 2012 at 6:56 AM | link to this | reply

CCT

¿ These poems look like flowers to me sir. The parts come together superbly like petals. BC-A, Bill’s R®st

posted by BC-A on May 7, 2012 at 6:07 AM | link to this | reply

The rhythm felt off with the poem... to me it felt forced, as if you had had a good idea and were struggling to make it work when it didn't want to. It certainly didn't have your usual easy flow

posted by lionreign on May 7, 2012 at 3:23 AM | link to this | reply

First, I loved the flower. I am not much of a critic or poet and I hate to put that right up front because I want my rate to count. I loved all three. You see to me they were visual, they were from my time, my family had a store during the rationing days when if you didn't have the stamps you couldn't buy. I loved them...KEEP WRITING!

posted by Justi on May 7, 2012 at 12:25 AM | link to this | reply

Re:Nita

Thank you Nita,it is always a pleasure,

posted by C_C_T on May 6, 2012 at 11:36 PM | link to this | reply

Re: DKosef

Yes I expect he was the only one to get only when things got tough. Thank you, have a sarney

posted by C_C_T on May 6, 2012 at 11:34 PM | link to this | reply

Re adnohr:

No I think basically; you are all too soft hearted and secretly romantic, hidden of course behind a proclaimed toughness, necessary to survive in your environment. Thank you for your criticism.

posted by C_C_T on May 6, 2012 at 11:31 PM | link to this | reply

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Hi Kabu, if you keep on I shall have to bring back some old gnome poems and that will mean you will have to write yours again. I hope you have no extra pains after pulling the latest rock.

posted by C_C_T on May 6, 2012 at 11:22 PM | link to this | reply

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Hello Pat, now I don't think it would've been a good idea to let your mum see you scuffing your shoes, nothing seem to last long in those days some of the shoes appeared to be made of cardboard. I remember my mum making me wear a pair of shoes which had some fancy holes in the top, and I was worried in case they were girls. I remember the first morning in school I pushed my feet right under the desk. Two boys in the next desk were looking at me and giggling, of course I thought it was my shoes, much to my relief they had put a drawing pin on my chair, but it had tipped over.

posted by C_C_T on May 6, 2012 at 11:06 PM | link to this | reply

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Where are those critics gone, gone to the boneyard everyone . Roses? A bunch of daisies drives them crazy. You were always too extravagant Wiley. Did you know when you can st step on five daisies it is spring.

posted by C_C_T on May 6, 2012 at 10:58 PM | link to this | reply

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Hi FS the Teds of this world have more or less disappeared in this country, I suppose they get their housing and allowance in most cases.

posted by C_C_T on May 6, 2012 at 10:53 PM | link to this | reply

Re: SAM

Thank you Sam an interesting reply. No wonder you are popular, you boost a person's morale.

posted by C_C_T on May 6, 2012 at 10:51 PM | link to this | reply

First off, I know what you mean when you are not satisfied with a poem(s); what we may dislike others find meaning and entertainment and at times it can be thought provoking! Such was the case for me today! I remember you telling us about the rain when you helped your Dad! So that was neat to read in the last one because it took me to an earlier time! And in the first one I liked the freedom to love! I wonder how many people can truly say they are such as that! Nice work all the way around for me! sam

posted by sam444 on May 6, 2012 at 10:42 PM | link to this | reply

I say that you did fine with all of your poems...It's interesting to read of getting things for Ted.

posted by FormerStudentIntern on May 6, 2012 at 8:21 PM | link to this | reply

Free to fall in love was very nice, (So all it took was a dreamy bouquet of roses? What a cheapo )

There’s never enough Milkmaids? Enjoyed that.“For the way those tiny lingers tied” (fingers?) might be better!! You were after more than tying that knot methinks.

TED 1940-I loved this, always like your tales of the war years and home life old chap.

“ I remember this shop it smelled cold and had a real stone floor,

a brown counter and a bell that rang before the door opened.

The bell was on a spring and shook wildly,”

posted by WileyJohn on May 6, 2012 at 6:13 PM | link to this | reply

We always travel through time with your poetry and stories...

It's nice. I do remember the ration books, mama trading stamps with her sisters, some used more sugar. She needed leather stamps, we were always wearing out our shoes.

posted by Pat_B on May 6, 2012 at 4:26 PM | link to this | reply

loved everything from the beautiful picture to the bit of lard.

You take great pics, your write great poetry and you tell a durn good yarn!!!!!1

posted by Kabu on May 6, 2012 at 3:41 PM | link to this | reply

You won't get criticism from me for that first poem, CC - I liked it...a lot. And the second one too. And also the story about Ted's rations. So either you are a darned good writer, or I'm a darned poor critic.