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Re: sam444

Thank you so much.  A gesture or smile does seem a more efficient way of communicating sometimes

posted by lionreign on December 13, 2011 at 8:36 AM | link to this | reply

Re: sam444

posted by lionreign on December 13, 2011 at 8:35 AM | link to this | reply

Re: So like the way I think.....

Thanks Straightforward, I wonder if it is normal among the creative types...

posted by lionreign on December 13, 2011 at 8:22 AM | link to this | reply

Re: lionreign

thanks Wiley but I think I would have to get somebody else to read them - I'd never be able to do it myself

posted by lionreign on December 13, 2011 at 8:19 AM | link to this | reply

Sometimes the words do not flow from the pen as one would like but a gesture or a smile can have the same effect! This was very well versed and I am certain it can affect the reader in one way or another for it seems we have all had that threshold to cross at one time or another! Love is powerful and the words never seem to do the justice we hope but alas we try and try nonetheless! sam 

posted by sam444 on December 13, 2011 at 7:47 AM | link to this | reply

Re: Dr_JPT

Absolutely!  I find that even when we use the same words we often speak different languages.  Thank you

posted by lionreign on December 13, 2011 at 7:47 AM | link to this | reply

Re: jfm32

Thank you, it does get a bit stuffy, doesn't it?  I thought that when I read it through, but then I knew where the first rush of inspiration had ended and thought I may be being over critical.  Thanks for the input, it will help me make it a better poem

posted by lionreign on December 13, 2011 at 7:44 AM | link to this | reply

Re: i am pretty sure that she knows because they come from your heart

Thanks Kabu, I suspect she does enjoy them

posted by lionreign on December 13, 2011 at 7:32 AM | link to this | reply

Re: C_C_T

Now where is the fun in making poetry from half truths?  I try to keep them all honest but it would be nice to get some beauty there too

 

posted by lionreign on December 13, 2011 at 7:29 AM | link to this | reply

So like the way I think.....

posted by Straightforward on December 10, 2011 at 6:50 AM | link to this | reply

lionreign

Put them all on a CD so she can hear your poetry ad infinitum old chap.

posted by WileyJohn on December 10, 2011 at 6:44 AM | link to this | reply

This sound and fits me as I was and with some today, not always in a romantic sense.  I think it has to do with linguistics for depending on the culture and the language within and without, two can talk and neither truly gets what the other says, yet with a touch can get what they mean. Wonderful writing.

posted by Dr_JPT on December 10, 2011 at 1:41 AM | link to this | reply

I like the personalness of this--as if talking to yourself. But then I felt it did get a bit formal, when you seemed to turn the inner voice into an outer form--the bane of all us poets.

posted by jfm32 on December 9, 2011 at 10:20 PM | link to this | reply

i am pretty sure that she knows because they come from your heart

that they are the best for her ever written.

posted by Kabu on December 9, 2011 at 2:39 PM | link to this | reply

If it is the truth it will the most beautiful thing you say Lion. Description has to be under stood by both parties.

posted by C_C_T on December 9, 2011 at 10:29 AM | link to this | reply