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posted by
Riversidepoet
on April 22, 2011 at 12:20 PM
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I didn't know who you were talking with till i re=read and noticed the title--and without it the poem makes no sense. On 1st read I thought you were a massicust wallowing, and I was ready to dismiss. But why hide what to you is obvious. You are adressing Sensation personally as a you would a person, so why not do that as you would with a person, and do a salutation--eg "Oh,Sensation...", then Sensation would know you are adressing it, and we would know from the outset what this thought is about. I don't like searching for missing links, but in this case, I'm gald I did. Let me know what you think.
posted by
jfm32
on April 22, 2011 at 11:51 AM
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