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God's and my creation chanting softly,
Dad-dee, Dad-dee, come inside,
it's getting too cold...
I LOVE THIS ENDING
posted by
Riversidepoet
on January 17, 2011 at 12:45 PM
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I liked how you went from peaceful to troubled at the end... Great work! xoxoxo
posted by
Sinome
on January 16, 2011 at 9:11 PM
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very peaceful and serene, at least until the door slides opened, lol
posted by
eburns111
on January 16, 2011 at 6:37 PM
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I am with Bill a beautiful scene! sam
posted by
sam444
on January 16, 2011 at 11:37 AM
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My Nite
Even on re-reading, the cricket part has me a bit confused. But maybe I'm just being dense. It's a wonderful place-making poem for me, and the end is pretty magical!
posted by
2902
on January 16, 2011 at 4:40 AM
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aceblade
Y a beautiful scene love. BC-A, Bill’s R®st
posted by
BC-A
on January 15, 2011 at 7:34 PM
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