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What a delight! I liked how it began and it continued to build within the imagery en route to a wonderful conclusion that tied it all together! LOVE IT!!! sam
posted by
sam444
on December 4, 2010 at 12:33 AM
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Re: WATCHING THAT CLOCK TICK IT SURE IS LIKE AN EXCITED HEART BEAT.
Thanks Kabu, I confess to loving the sound of a ticking clock, and it was listening to one of mine that inspired this poem
posted by
lionreign
on December 3, 2010 at 7:42 AM
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Re: elysianfields
Thanks so much Elyse, I'm am delighted to have brought a little happiness
posted by
lionreign
on December 3, 2010 at 7:39 AM
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Re: lionreign, you have captured the anticipation in the waiting
thanks so much Rumor!
posted by
lionreign
on December 3, 2010 at 7:32 AM
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Re: Clock Beats
Thanks Cheerygirl - I think it's my best idiom
posted by
lionreign
on December 3, 2010 at 7:28 AM
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Re: You set the scene really well with the metronome reference
Thanks malcolm, I'm delighted that I succeeded in that :D
posted by
lionreign
on December 3, 2010 at 7:17 AM
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Re: Corncroak
That's true... but then there can be savour in the waiting
posted by
lionreign
on December 3, 2010 at 7:09 AM
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WATCHING THAT CLOCK TICK IT SURE IS LIKE AN EXCITED HEART BEAT.
posted by
Kabu
on December 2, 2010 at 5:56 PM
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ah but your clock ticking sounds lyrical - musical and I know when she's there it will be just that ~ music!!! This made me feel a lilt of joy actually. Elyse
posted by
elysianfields
on December 2, 2010 at 4:49 PM
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lionreign, you have captured the anticipation in the waiting
perfectly...the heart-metronome reference was very clever.
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posted by
Rumor
on December 2, 2010 at 3:51 PM
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Clock Beats
Enjoyable poem. You are more than good at romantic poetry Lionreign.
posted by
Cheerygirl
on December 2, 2010 at 3:44 PM
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You set the scene really well with the metronome reference
and this then gave the poem a regular pulse I thought.
posted by
malcolm
on December 2, 2010 at 12:12 PM
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And then the clock goes mad and spins round quite clever Lion . reminded me of when I was a pay clerk waiting for the evening spin off.
posted by
C_C_T
on December 2, 2010 at 10:50 AM
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