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I appreciate this post! My son is headed out soon, and I have lost friends and family due to war! I so desire peace! sam
posted by
sam444
on November 18, 2010 at 4:29 AM
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You have me hooked on these cast of characters. You bring each to life well.
posted by
FormerStudentIntern
on November 17, 2010 at 7:13 PM
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It is a great article...excellent at Blogit where we just write mostly
one draft...but the beginning doesn't grab me...and it has to. Shorten/ clip the first linesso that I have no high grass to walk through, make me want to read on....as a readerIam lazy...so grab me.
But then it is so good I wanted to read to the end.
posted by
Kabu
on November 17, 2010 at 2:57 PM
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I enjoyed reading it--very interesting. When grandson came home for his first furlough after Marine Boot Camp, he presented me with his picture in the dress blues in a very nice frame. While son and he were talking, I found out for the first time that the picture was taken in a fake open down the back uniform fastened with velcro and that the pants he had on didn't even match. Son said it was the same for his Navy picture back in 1982 when he was wearing shorts. They do that for speed. They each just slip their arms into the same fake uniform and slap on a hat, and there you are. I thought that was so funny.
posted by
TAPS.
on November 17, 2010 at 6:06 AM
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And further...
I should always check my
own spelling before I press the button - I's??? I
did mean I'd...
posted by
Nautikos
on November 17, 2010 at 5:54 AM
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Tzippy
It's good but requires some minor 'copy editing'. For example: It's Marine
Corps (pronounced 'core'), and should always be in caps; the
evening doesn't whistle, the evening
wind does; aromas aren't 'warm', they don't
have a temperature; people are lean, not lien...There are a few things that sound a trifle awkward, and might be revised a bit...I hope this helps. If you wish, I's be glad to do a more thorough job - let me know...
posted by
Nautikos
on November 17, 2010 at 5:51 AM
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