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I love it. I could feel her pain and disappointment. 
posted by
screaming_heart
on September 28, 2010 at 8:05 PM
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This sure is intense.
posted by
Straightforward
on September 25, 2010 at 8:44 PM
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Very intense
very unexpected from the title...I like this a lot.
posted by
Bel_
on September 25, 2010 at 8:39 PM
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goodbye is such bittersweet sorrow....
posted by
icedlatte
on September 25, 2010 at 5:58 PM
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Good work!
posted by
Sinome
on September 25, 2010 at 2:22 PM
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Your meter is quite good and it wors for me. I thought I was going to be reading another love poem, but was pleasntly surprised by the changes in direction, which for me, deepened the meaning of the piece. A nimble mind at work...bravo.
posted by
jfm32
on September 25, 2010 at 11:47 AM
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