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Thanks Teddy, really do appreciate the great encouragement. Visit often and feel free to give feedback. love and joy, Kay
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KayJoy
on August 12, 2010 at 6:04 PM
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Thanks Corbin, appreciate your checking out my blog site. Thanks, also for the welcome. This is a different sort of place to be in. Trying to get use to it here. Visit often, I need the feedback. love and joy, Kay
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KayJoy
on August 12, 2010 at 6:03 PM
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Thanks Sam, appreciated the comments. I enjoy the feedback, so visit often, I need the help, and encouragement. love and joy, Kay
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KayJoy
on August 12, 2010 at 5:59 PM
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Thanks Ash. I never would have put it that way, "directly to the toilet," but you got the right idea. Visit again, I enjoy the feed back. love and joy, Kay 
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KayJoy
on August 12, 2010 at 5:56 PM
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Nice & welcome...
btw, it's best to connect that room of depreciation directly to the toilet, don't you think :)?
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ash_pradhan
on August 12, 2010 at 4:59 PM
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Thanks a lot Carl, I appreciate the feedback. I am a terrible speller, and my punctuation is even worst. English is not my thing. I just wright and hope someone else will do the rest for me. I might be wrong, however, if I had done more, it might would have been too long. I tried to get as much as possible in fewer lines. It is difficult to keep a reader's attention. Thanks again, anytime, Carl. love and joy, Kay
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KayJoy
on August 12, 2010 at 3:17 PM
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Welcome to Blogit!
Neat premise, though I felt it did not fully exploit the imagery of rooms. The word is "hinge", by the way, but even if the misspelling did not distract, the room door image was left swinging. The "loose" was used where "lose" was meant but again, "loose" could have been used to build on the door image, as in "the marriage bonds come loose", as in off their hinges.
Good start, though.
Carl Peter
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cpklapper
on August 12, 2010 at 2:54 PM
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I really liked the rhyme scheme; it set up a nice cadence! I thought the imagery was exquisite! And, welcome to Blogit! sam
posted by
sam444
on August 12, 2010 at 1:58 PM
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Always go with the positive...........Welcome to Blogit!
posted by
Corbin_Dallas
on August 12, 2010 at 1:47 PM
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Excellent!
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teddypoet_TheGoodByeFade
on August 12, 2010 at 1:43 PM
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