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Just a beautiful image mariss and the last line is just lovely. thank you for the visit.
posted by
shobana
on August 8, 2010 at 6:39 PM
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Z I used to love to swim in my backyard pool past my garden of sweet Williams, petunias, marigolds, zinnias, and other flowers and then the Viburnum American Cranberry hedge and look over at the stone fireplace and patio. In August the maple leaves began yo fall. When my father took me to the raspberry patch on the old dairy farm I picked up the first fallen leaf and named it Leafy. I brought it home love. BC-A, Bill’s RJLst
posted by
BC-A
on August 7, 2010 at 10:42 AM
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That is the beauty of our Redeemer! I could visualize it all and the soothing relief, too! I like Autumn, too! sam
posted by
sam444
on August 6, 2010 at 8:22 PM
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THE AUTUMN TIME OF OUR LIFE ...THIS IS LOVELY AS YOU FLOAT
IN THE WATER...THE PAIN EASING AWAY.
posted by
Kabu
on August 6, 2010 at 7:25 PM
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Mariss, another great poem. Say are you saving these at all, in a collection for publication They are good!
posted by
dsm_tchr
on August 6, 2010 at 5:02 PM
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I liked how you approached this by letting the poem write itself, and not hitting someone over the head with a religious idea. But why not just title this piece "Redemtion"?...and let the reader figure it out. Actually, I'm glad I read this one because I haven't thought about redemption lately, and it just seems so much more personal than an idea of god. Ok, so you touched me today. Thanks.
.....John
posted by
jfm32
on August 6, 2010 at 3:49 PM
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