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time marches on..."tick - tock" captures it perfectly....
and what we do with our time is entirely up to us.
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posted by
Rumor
on August 5, 2010 at 11:34 AM
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Hi, Shobana only if life moved with clock like precision! A wonderful poem with a great close! Hope you are doing fine & moving on with the flow of life.
posted by
shamasehar
on August 5, 2010 at 10:30 AM
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if only it could be this clear on those days when we need insight! Wonderful imagery and again a great message! This is the third poem today that I read that made great use of onomatopoeia! KUDOS! How are you doing with your grief! I think of you and pray the pain lessens with each day! Love you dearly my Shobana! Your sam
posted by
sam444
on August 4, 2010 at 7:43 PM
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Life goes on, and we have to do our best to move along with it, learning from our mistakes along the way.
posted by
FormerStudentIntern
on August 4, 2010 at 7:20 PM
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Move on to the right ones and leave the wrong ones...I'll take you up on that!! 
posted by
mariss9
on August 4, 2010 at 11:10 AM
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shobana
ZWork and move love. BC-A, Bill’s RJLst
posted by
BC-A
on August 4, 2010 at 10:43 AM
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Wonderful...
posted by
teddypoet_TheGoodByeFade
on August 4, 2010 at 9:15 AM
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LOLOL, I know CC..thank you for the comfort. And I can tell you that you are 101% right about words making such a difference. Good that you repented too. Well, wild horses won't drag me away from revealing how I feel, but I have toned down quite a bit CC...not so emotive these days..I think I will write a love song..LOL
posted by
shobana
on August 4, 2010 at 1:30 AM
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Hello Shobana A nice poem it flows as people say. In a way it is good to write about one's emotions. One can try and disguise the fact which you are not doing in this case I suggest.
This makes the poem feel more in tune with the writer and you are lucky they come out of the blue. Sometimes I feel that my blue has turned into a lazy feeling, so I said this morning just make short comments, well not for Shobana because she needs a bit of comfort. . You see Shobana what a difference a few words make so I scrubbed the last few words
I repented C.C.
posted by
C_C_T
on August 4, 2010 at 1:11 AM
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Lovely piece, time is given to us for learning and i see with each tick and tock you are passing the tests of time
posted by
spiderfly
on August 3, 2010 at 11:44 PM
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Hi Nita, thank you and it is wonderful as always to see you here.
posted by
shobana
on August 3, 2010 at 10:34 PM
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Lovely thoughts and cadence Shobana!
posted by
Nita09
on August 3, 2010 at 10:33 PM
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Re: Wonderful and flowing perfectly, Dear Shobana!
Thank you Katray, I do believe it is both ways.
posted by
shobana
on August 3, 2010 at 8:45 PM
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Wonderful and flowing perfectly, Dear Shobana!
Time is the greatest teacher..and puzzler too sometimes!
posted by
Katray2
on August 3, 2010 at 8:30 PM
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WOw if this came to you out of the blue that "blue" must be filled with inspiration :-) Great poem Shobana... xoxoxo
posted by
Sinome
on August 3, 2010 at 8:25 PM
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TICK TOCK THIS OLD OLD CLOCK
lOVELY DARLING.
posted by
Kabu
on August 3, 2010 at 8:25 PM
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Shobana
"Leave the question marked wrong
Move on to the right ones........" I loved that 'cuz used to always go to the one I had right luv. That was fun poetry
posted by
WileyJohn
on August 3, 2010 at 8:23 PM
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TICK TOCK i'M AN OLD OLD CLOCK.....
posted by
Kabu
on August 3, 2010 at 8:23 PM
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Tick Tock it goes
Wonderful,,I did enjoy it very much/LBJ
posted by
MsJudy
on August 3, 2010 at 8:09 PM
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Hi dsm - for sure I can. It has been a rough ride for this woman in the poem both mentally and physically. Now it is time for her to pick up the shreds of pieces of her life and to move on. She has done her best and the Lord's knows of her heart and actions, if she is judged ..it would be wise to have the questions right. I am really glad you asked me and my poems are just written out of the blue. Everyday emotions and feelings that tend to arise. Sometimes dsm I feel one never really knows it all no matter how much one thinks they do. Thank you for the visit.
posted by
shobana
on August 3, 2010 at 7:51 PM
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Shobana, I like the rhythm of this piece. Can yoou give me an author's view of it?
posted by
dsm_tchr
on August 3, 2010 at 7:44 PM
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