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Wow! This reads like a short story with the voice of a storyteller. Love the 1st person approach and how the story weaves itself from a simple scent of a memory. Just a thought, but if you still have a novel in the back of your mind, it seems to me this would be a wonderful opening. You already have a character with both a voice and a past (succinctly written). I felt like turning the page to find out more about her and her story. Beautiful wtriting!
posted by
jfm32
on July 22, 2010 at 2:01 PM
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Sinome
± I love the senses in the morning. However the memories that they seem to elicit feel haunting and melancholy. Nevertheless the mornings are beautiful. The earlier in the day the more haunting feeling love. BC-A, Bill’s RJLst
posted by
BC-A
on July 21, 2010 at 3:34 AM
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jasmine
This poem evoked a lot of familiar feelings, especially about the feeling of nostalgia itself. I was struck by your image of having a camera in the mind that remembers childhood experiences. And I agree that the nose might be the best camera - scents can trigger scenes and feelings from decades ago without our being able always to even identify them. In fewer words: I really liked your poem!
posted by
2902
on July 21, 2010 at 1:31 AM
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Hi I am very tired tonight, but your poems always soothe me so.
posted by
Kabu
on July 20, 2010 at 8:56 PM
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A long walk home that must be, one I hope that I never have to take.
posted by
FormerStudentIntern
on July 20, 2010 at 6:58 PM
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Thoughts of jasmin
I love the smell of jasmine..and I loved this poem, is wonderfully written and just flowed smoothly through to the last line..great job/LB
posted by
MsJudy
on July 20, 2010 at 5:09 PM
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Sinome
Wow.... and a deep contented ~sigh~. This was so beautifully written!
posted by
Troosha
on July 20, 2010 at 10:49 AM
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Wow Sinome, this poem is breathtaking in its intensity! While it's true that you can never go back to the exact times of your nostalgia, there is a certain satisfaction in wading through the deep waters of those sweet memories, even while biting back the pain that comes with those memories. Something about a scent makes it impossible to stifle this phenomenon, and you have conveyed that scenario and the feelings that it brings about with such clarity here.
posted by
calia14
on July 20, 2010 at 8:15 AM
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One of your nicest Simone you are warm, scented and nostalgic.
posted by
C_C_T
on July 20, 2010 at 7:56 AM
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Beautiful heartbreak
Nobody does such tender melancholy as well as you xoxoxoxo
posted by
lionreign
on July 20, 2010 at 7:27 AM
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This is an especially wonderful writing of yours. I enjoyed it so much.
posted by
TAPS.
on July 20, 2010 at 7:10 AM
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Your memories are rich Sinome ~ beautifully and innocently so. This is excellent - I walked with you during your journey back home and smelled the jasmine.
Elyse
posted by
elysianfields
on July 20, 2010 at 7:04 AM
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