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Beautiful poem..you can almost feel what she is feeling..I enjoyed it very much/LB
posted by
MsJudy
on July 4, 2010 at 2:17 PM
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Interesting portrait, and almost seems to be an entrance into a novel, or how a great novelist might write--thinking about George Elliot (a femme) as she writes her 1st paragraph of Silas Marner. (Isn't it interesting that the great explosion of the English novel was led by so many woman--eg Charlot Bronte, Austin et alia?) Am I beginning to hear the seeds of a novel in this voice?
Take a look at your last line. I know this is arbitrarty, but why repeat the title when the poem is already finished (as a poem). This is something only a novelist would write.
I've been watching how you've been exploring an experice for the last year or so, and you have been falling, quite naturally, into narrative.
But no one knows more about your inner feelings within a life than you?
So now that you got most of the info you need, why not write it big.
I know that character is not exactly you, so why don't you invent her?
Just a thought, jm
posted by
jfm32
on July 4, 2010 at 7:16 AM
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Sinome
Z It’s like a dream looks back love. BC=-A, Bill’s RJLst
posted by
BC-A
on July 4, 2010 at 5:43 AM
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Alone
Terribly sweet Simone this is you at your best
posted by
C_C_T
on July 4, 2010 at 12:26 AM
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Sinome
I remember when I just wanted to run and escape the darkness of life and then I met Kabu, and I really 'dig' your beautiful poetry all the time luv
posted by
WileyJohn
on July 3, 2010 at 7:57 PM
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Deeply expressed, these words of sadness. A beautiful piece.
posted by
calia14
on July 3, 2010 at 7:39 PM
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Hi Marta
Crying melancholy, directed straight at the reader's
. but xoxoxox)o
posted by
anib
on July 3, 2010 at 6:48 PM
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Tears, Tears, Tears
There are no words of comfort
posted by
skye08
on July 3, 2010 at 6:26 PM
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It is a terrible emptiness ..that first realization of being completely on
your own....no twosome anymore...just self.
posted by
Kabu
on July 3, 2010 at 5:52 PM
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Going forward on one's own is so difficult. Hopefully better days are ahead.
posted by
FormerStudentIntern
on July 3, 2010 at 5:30 PM
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So melancholic Sinome, poignant poem.
posted by
shobana
on July 3, 2010 at 4:01 PM
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