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Thank you jfm.
posted by
shobana
on June 27, 2010 at 3:00 PM
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Shobana
So well expressed luv and certainly "
Each day brings forth new awareness" as does your poetry luv.
posted by
WileyJohn
on June 27, 2010 at 10:55 AM
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Thanks for your visit, and have a great week! Hope things are ok.
posted by
Nita09
on June 27, 2010 at 8:48 AM
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Terrific! Glad you're back Shobhna--will write with news tomorrow! Nita
posted by
Nita09
on June 27, 2010 at 8:46 AM
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LOL??? Well, I'm glad you have a sense of humor! More to the point is the craft. Oscar Wilde once wrote the the purpose of writing is to reveal art and hide the artist. In this sense what I did like is that you constructed a window to look out of, and of course we are all going to observe different things, including our own thought experience. In other words, you didn't let thought interfere with the idea of possibility, but how else to should a painter approach a blank canvass?
So I quite agree: don't think, just write. The world could use a few more windows.
posted by
jfm32
on June 27, 2010 at 8:41 AM
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I love the idea that the crimson may be caused by raging storms within. Something like every cloud having a silver lining, but so much more poetic.
posted by
Rockingrector_retd
on June 27, 2010 at 8:02 AM
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Good to see you back! What a meaningful dawn! The last few lines were superb!
posted by
shamasehar
on June 27, 2010 at 3:39 AM
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Hey Sam, I was really hoping I could get your attention here..LOL. How so fun to have that family get together! Oh I wish I was there too, I can try barbequing some thing or other ..lol. I will be on and off here too sweetie, I have quite a bit of work to do but I do catch up with my reading here though. Take care and have a wonderful time ok. Love you a zillion too.
posted by
shobana
on June 27, 2010 at 12:54 AM
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jfm32
Thank you for liking my poem..LOL. I'm sorry but I had to laugh at your conclusion of my poem. I must clarify that my poems get my readers either bewildered, confused, lovestruck or plain irritated with me and also bring about concussion...LOL., and I really don't know why!! I know it is like beating around the bush (my poems) but that is the way I write them. Something must be terribly wrong with the way I think but when I write my thoughts down, I mostly mistaken it to be understood. Thought I would just let you know since you read it twice and confirmed your conclusion.
posted by
shobana
on June 27, 2010 at 12:50 AM
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Hey Sweetie! Stunning imagery! I have been out trying to catch up on my reading and so amazed at how far behind I got! But this is exquisite imagery! Fine use of colors, too! I am sending a big hug and my love and will try to be caught up by tomorrow! My brother's daughter is in from the Midwest and we have a family get together at my house tomorrow! Grilling and playing horseshoes! Wish you could be here, it would be so much fun! Love you dearly! Your sam
posted by
sam444
on June 27, 2010 at 12:48 AM
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Yes I shall really try lustorlove as it is the in between of night and day. thanks for the visit.
posted by
shobana
on June 27, 2010 at 12:43 AM
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Re: Shobana
Thank you for the visit and you being simple minded is way off mark CC. I know about the rose, my emoticons work according to their whim and fancy and sometimes I do really forget to send a rose with my message ( the age factor here again)
posted by
shobana
on June 27, 2010 at 12:42 AM
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Dawn of Crimson
Beautiful poem Shobana../LB
posted by
MsJudy
on June 26, 2010 at 11:44 PM
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Shobana
LIt’s a case of using the right color love. BC-A, Bill’s RJLst
posted by
BC-A
on June 26, 2010 at 11:18 PM
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Shobana
Hi Shobana lovely poem of course being simple minded I can't help but feel that this is a woman's passion which to her is as powerful as the blood red of the morning sky a form of sublimation presented delicately. You will have to imagine the rose, the site is a bit iffy.
posted by
C_C_T
on June 26, 2010 at 11:14 PM
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dont let the moon blind you
posted by
Lanetay
on June 26, 2010 at 9:20 PM
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Hey, me again
Just had another read, and I see I might have missed some of the counterpoints. But I still stand by my first impression: this is the concrete allegory of The Dawn.
posted by
jfm32
on June 26, 2010 at 7:31 PM
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Interesting and poignant use and choise of words. (thank god it wasn't another "Crimson Dawn"!) Quite a novel approach to a usual subject, and being so close to all that and still to turn it around anew. I especially liked the construct and the inner spacing of the voice--eg. the 1st and 2nd cycle of the recurring event. (I could almost hear it breathing, and then sighing). What's most interesting is how the 1st and 2nd parts (if there are any) are seemlessly integrated and I'm left (quite silently) with the impression of eternity moving thru time as recurrence...and this open arm thing at the end--what a welcome.
Other than that, I did like the poem.
posted by
jfm32
on June 26, 2010 at 7:03 PM
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welcomeback dear one...hope you had a nice couple of days away
posted by
Kabu
on June 26, 2010 at 6:57 PM
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shobana, huh, interesting.
posted by
dsm_tchr
on June 26, 2010 at 6:46 PM
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I received a sene of rebirth while reading this poem.
posted by
FormerStudentIntern
on June 26, 2010 at 6:35 PM
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Stunning piece :-) xoxoxoxo
posted by
Sinome
on June 26, 2010 at 4:33 PM
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WOW!!!!
posted by
lovelyladymonk
on June 26, 2010 at 4:26 PM
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loved the flow. honestly i did
posted by
NIGHTWRITE
on June 26, 2010 at 4:18 PM
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Shobana
At the dawn of crimson Mom will survive and will be again Beauty itself. Blessings Fema
posted by
fememefeme
on June 26, 2010 at 3:41 PM
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