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Your poem Stolen ~ very touching --- as if one who has lost something that once was had or could have (should have) had.
and of Element:
"The shadowy brown irresistible plight of the non-awakened
rests gently in this element." and the ending is concise. "to bring it to flower will be wonder enough" Period. I liked the imagery and the thought ~ Oh please CC, do write on~~~ E.E.
posted by
elysianfields
on March 25, 2010 at 7:56 PM
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Re: SAM
I was just trying to see if I could write poetry Sam. I am afraid that I had to snatch a Muse to do it. They are a bit thin on the ground.
posted by
C_C_T
on March 25, 2010 at 8:06 AM
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Re: ifm32
yes I agree with you ifm32 sometimes one grows careless or hasn't got the ability to understand that which one has written for a while. Your comments appreciated.
posted by
C_C_T
on March 25, 2010 at 8:01 AM
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Re: Shobana
However do you think of such nice replies Shobana,
posted by
C_C_T
on March 25, 2010 at 7:52 AM
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Re: Chuck
good thinking Chuck thank you
posted by
C_C_T
on March 25, 2010 at 7:48 AM
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Re: Great work indeed...
Thanks Teddy.
posted by
C_C_T
on March 25, 2010 at 7:47 AM
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Great work indeed...
posted by
teddypoet_TheGoodByeFade
on March 24, 2010 at 6:20 PM
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Very nice
posted by
Chuck_E_Ibrahim
on March 24, 2010 at 6:17 PM
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I only like commenting on 1 poem at a time, and this one is for Stolen.
I especially like this one, how the first stanza sets up the second, and I find a simple directness remeniscent of Emily Dickenson (who really like), but I did get a little diconcerted with a the periods. Consider that if a poem is just a thought painting, would you place a dot (stop sign) after every brushstoke?
I thougt the 2nd stanza very masterful, and was taken by surprize with "a key not taken with a kiss", and I wanted to stop and remain here. For me, this was the end of the poem.
posted by
jfm32
on March 24, 2010 at 4:33 PM
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CC - Just magnificent, sometimes when you lose that key to the golden door is such a tragedy. Always Surrounded by suspicion is a truly a sad thing. I loved the poem, so much in there. The second one too but the first one remains in my mind.
posted by
shobana
on March 24, 2010 at 3:27 PM
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I really liked both poems; but, this caught my eye:
You open up the golden door.
I weep beneath the sky.
Such truth! It seems when one is on one page, the other is on a different page! And so to weep when it is not in sync! sam
posted by
sam444
on March 24, 2010 at 2:42 PM
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Corn the first seems so sad as though something that may have brought
great joy ....you let go of..and the second...only a true poet could observe so much of life and write it.
posted by
Kabu
on March 24, 2010 at 1:13 PM
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