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Re: hiccups
Thank you! It was fun to write, especially once I solved the narrative problem - 2 things in stanza one saved me a lot of time and space: making her my date and using that word "couple".
posted by
2902
on February 5, 2010 at 2:27 PM
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clever, and creative ~ made me giggle for sure. Elyse
posted by
elysianfields
on February 5, 2010 at 2:21 PM
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I don't know how
I don't know how I missed you before. I'm still in transit, but I'm coming back.
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posted by
2902
on February 5, 2010 at 10:08 AM
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A Funny Scene
You should probably keep it in mind as a scene for a screenplay.
Carl Peter
PS: Thanks for stopping by at my blog.
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cpklapper
on February 5, 2010 at 8:11 AM
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Re: Well, let's call them "The Hics"
Thank you! It's one of those family stories that get told at get-togethers and needed a little bit of celebration.
posted by
2902
on February 5, 2010 at 4:48 AM
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What a delightful poem! Well orchestrated, too! sam
posted by
sam444
on February 5, 2010 at 1:25 AM
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f The technique of getting rid of hip cups put into poetry works out pleasurably. BC-A, Bill’s RJLst
posted by
BC-A
on February 4, 2010 at 10:48 PM
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Re: Lol, this is Great!
Thanks! That means a lot to me! I usually come up with this stuff early in the morning and often wonder how it sounds later in the day. I read it to my wife at breakfast and she likes it, but we're each other's biggest fans.
posted by
2902
on February 4, 2010 at 2:51 PM
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Lol, this is Great!
I so enjoy poetry that is amusing - I can't write it, but I like reading..:)
posted by
Katray2
on February 4, 2010 at 12:56 PM
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Re: Hippups
Well, I don't know now simple it would actually be - Kate tells me she wasn't quite sure the wife believed the real explanation (But I'm sure that secretly it was kind of fun for the husband, though)!. Thank you for the visit and comment!
posted by
2902
on February 4, 2010 at 9:47 AM
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Re: LOL
Thank you very much! Her name is Kate, and this really happened in San Francisco (she's my sister-in-law, but I made her a girlfriend to keep the poem short and punchy).
posted by
2902
on February 4, 2010 at 9:37 AM
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Hippups
If we could all be cured that way thing would be better and solution simple. Nice works. Fema
posted by
fememefeme
on February 4, 2010 at 9:13 AM
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LOL
What a great way to cure the hiccoughs - brilliant poem!
posted by
lionreign
on February 4, 2010 at 7:23 AM
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