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sinome it can't be that sad....
posted by
Star5_
on June 17, 2009 at 9:39 PM
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Quite amazing.
posted by
FormerStudentIntern
on June 17, 2009 at 7:21 PM
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and as we pour our words onto the page they swim in sorrow, but all water and tears lead to the sea and meet all the other tears and as it all swirls together there becomes hope and the ocean is full of emotion on a grand scale but our tears are tiny drops so small so insignificant if we look at the grand scale of things. What a wonderful river of emotion drowning your page, well written
posted by
spiderfly
on June 17, 2009 at 1:17 PM
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Sinome, sad and very moving...your similies are all worth many looks
and rend the heart and the memories...
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posted by
Rumor
on June 17, 2009 at 12:56 PM
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What an ending! I did not see it coming! It put that pizzazz in the poem even though sorrowful, it dressed it up magnificently! sammie loves you sweetie!
posted by
sam444
on June 17, 2009 at 12:21 PM
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...until she can't help but bloom again.
posted by
texture
on June 17, 2009 at 11:00 AM
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I can envision the planet itself being the one drained of nourishment and so sorrowing. Piqued and bleak emotions .Sad teardrop!
posted by
merkie
on June 17, 2009 at 9:10 AM
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Beautifully expressed...sometimes we forget to balance the equation, and only subtract.
posted by
Nita09
on June 17, 2009 at 8:39 AM
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wow... the beautifully crafted sadness of this piece is almost savage
in it's realisation.... it makes me want to write an assertion on second chances and new dawns in an attempt to nurture a smile.
Bright the day and bright it's dawning
On our return to gentled lands
Learn from mistakes and heed their warning
If one day you would understand:
True happiness is always respawning
To grasp it, just extend you hand
posted by
lionreign
on June 17, 2009 at 7:28 AM
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How very sad Sinome
but perfect imagery of one placing so much dependence of their happiness on another...... beautifully done my friend; many blessings and thanks
posted by
mariaki
on June 17, 2009 at 4:26 AM
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Sinome
An absolute masterpiece. Excellent.
posted by
shobana
on June 16, 2009 at 9:19 PM
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