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Sinome
You invited us to laugh at this poem, but I cannot laugh at a young girl's dreams - even if they were never fulfilled...
posted by
Nautikos
on May 3, 2009 at 10:02 AM
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I knew your imagery was an extention of your soul and this seals it! Kudos sweetie! Love you! sammie
xoxoxoxo
posted by
sam444
on May 3, 2009 at 6:54 AM
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Never would have guessed you were 16 when you wrote it.
posted by
FormerStudentIntern
on May 2, 2009 at 5:53 PM
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Naturally passionate and a beautiful yearning.
posted by
yellowrose55
on May 2, 2009 at 3:40 PM
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Pretty good poem for a 16-year old!
posted by
Rockingrector_retd
on May 2, 2009 at 12:29 PM
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sinome
Wonderful!!
posted by
TIMMYTALES
on May 2, 2009 at 9:50 AM
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How well you wrote even then! I agree with Hardilaziz. Thanks very much for your very generous comment on my post; it does encourage me to think of interesting topics. Nita.
posted by
Nita09
on May 2, 2009 at 9:48 AM
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posted by
Chilitree
on May 2, 2009 at 3:35 AM
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I can see that you were the same then- loving and caring.
posted by
hardilaziz
on May 2, 2009 at 3:24 AM
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So natural ...
posted by
afzal50
on May 1, 2009 at 9:36 PM
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sweet 16, and you still the same......ur writings are always exceptional...
posted by
Star5_
on May 1, 2009 at 8:05 PM
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Sinome, Nothing I find is laughable....
You wrote a wonderful heartfelt poem and 16 or 60, it's good!
posted by
Texas_Gem
on May 1, 2009 at 8:05 PM
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Sinome
So you've just always been special and gifted luv, wonderful......
posted by
WileyJohn
on May 1, 2009 at 7:53 PM
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I love it. I hear the impatience of the teenager in every single line, which is perfect because every teenager is eager to have their dreams come true...NOW. I hear the yearning of being needed, the desire to be desired, the overall want of the teenage soul within this poem. A perfect example of the intricate workings of a young mind ready for the world without knowing what's really in it.
posted by
NiteTide
on May 1, 2009 at 7:05 PM
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Sinome
For a 16 year old ..an awesome poem to write.
posted by
shobana
on May 1, 2009 at 6:23 PM
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Excellent poem, Excellent !
posted by
hazel_st_cricket
on May 1, 2009 at 5:55 PM
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this is so sweet 16
precious =)
posted by
mysteria
on May 1, 2009 at 5:54 PM
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