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Re: Frankly, I did not like the ending
I can definitely understand your point of view. It was a very jarring way to end the poem. I tend to write what I am feeling at the time so there you have it :) Thanks for the comment--kate
posted by
NewMentality
on February 3, 2009 at 9:19 PM
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Frankly, I did not like the ending
I was dwelling in the meditative underwater, protected from the pressures of the world and peaceful, and then suddenly lurched, swaggering, into the role of boastful conqueror.
posted by
cpklapper
on January 31, 2009 at 5:58 AM
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Like the last stanza for its intensity and passion.
posted by
hardilaziz
on January 30, 2009 at 7:35 PM
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creative imagery
I read a few of your pieces and I love your creativity! Btw, thank you for the comments on my latest entry too, so much appreciated! :)
Kim
posted by
Imaginerain08
on January 30, 2009 at 5:07 PM
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Great ending!
I love the twist - fantastic!
posted by
lionreign
on January 30, 2009 at 11:04 AM
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Amen, nothing like independence! Such exquisite imagery! sam
posted by
sam444
on January 30, 2009 at 6:33 AM
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Yeah... last 2 lines put it in the face!
posted by
gypsypoet1975
on January 30, 2009 at 4:03 AM
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Oh! Twist ending! Wasn't expecting that!
posted by
calia14
on January 29, 2009 at 8:43 PM
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