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                Good rhythym bringing the reader forward and forward through to the end of the poem.  Then all out of breath there you are at the end.  MichaudBlaline123  
                
                    posted by
                    michaudblaine
                     on November 29, 2008 at 8:23 PM
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                    Re-assuring to me
                
                
                
                    posted by
                    Straightforward
                     on November 22, 2008 at 9:17 PM
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                Very refreshing piece of poetry!
  
                
                    posted by
                    Soul_Builder101
                     on November 21, 2008 at 11:16 PM
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                Elegant freedom song. Loved it.  
                
                    posted by
                    hardilaziz
                     on November 21, 2008 at 7:47 PM
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                    I love your style and flow very inspiring.
                
                
                
                    posted by
                    Mystereo
                     on November 21, 2008 at 4:41 PM
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                The close is awesome. I liked these lines very much as well:  
If you stumble or falter along the way
  Don't worry or fear there's another day
   Amen! sam  
                
                    posted by
                    sam444
                     on November 21, 2008 at 4:29 PM
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