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The close was awe inspiring. If we could see across the endless sea. Wonderful imagery too! I am so sorry I got behind. These headaches are fitful! Shelly
posted by
sam444
on November 14, 2008 at 1:17 AM
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very sweet. Thank you for sharing
posted by
Smittenheimer
on November 11, 2008 at 12:37 PM
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this is soooo beautiful and touching, how your love winks and wisps..... tis lovely. thank you.
posted by
rubypoem
on November 11, 2008 at 3:25 AM
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sad and lovely
The opening/closing refrain will haunt me for a while. Very well done
posted by
lionreign
on November 10, 2008 at 8:38 AM
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Perhaps the sequel to this (lyrics-wise) could be...
Moving On as sung by Stevie Wonder.
posted by
Soul_Builder101
on November 10, 2008 at 8:32 AM
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This left me speechless, Merkie (and that doesn’t happen frequently). Such a resounding message of love…..
posted by
Troosha
on November 10, 2008 at 8:14 AM
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Your love carrying a cargo of passion and fantasy would surely carry you across the endless sea.
posted by
shamasehar
on November 10, 2008 at 4:36 AM
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NIGHT VISIONS
Wow, I like it, was that written about me? Big smiles. lol, I wish.
posted by
demultiflex
on November 10, 2008 at 2:43 AM
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Lovely poem Margaret..... it fuled my imagination... Excellent!
posted by
Sinome
on November 9, 2008 at 8:35 PM
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Re: Riversidepoet
Much appreciation Kent. Thank you.
posted by
merkie
on November 9, 2008 at 4:13 PM
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Hi Vicky ,thank you for the kind words!
posted by
merkie
on November 9, 2008 at 4:11 PM
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Re: jfm32
Thank you for your considered comments,John. I was looking at the punctuation and i agree with you. Sometimes I use it as a pause to think about the meaning as reading.I also like the idea of found art.Cool. Poetry perhaps the choice being essential . Again thanks so much.
posted by
merkie
on November 9, 2008 at 4:10 PM
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Re: lustorlove
Thank you
I am considering your comment. It leaves a sea of anwers swirling in my mind.
posted by
merkie
on November 9, 2008 at 2:43 PM
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TWO AWESOME TASKS, BOTH WOULD SEEM TO BE IMPOSSIBLE, BUT THROUGH DREAMS AND LOVE AND HOPE , I GUESS ALL THINGS ARE POSSIBLE, IT SEEMS ANYWAY, THANKS KENT
posted by
Riversidepoet
on November 9, 2008 at 12:15 PM
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Flowing like a song..... "Night Visions" is love carried out into a beautiful sea.
posted by
yellowrose55
on November 9, 2008 at 12:00 PM
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I'm considering your punctuation: Why do you feel you need it? A line on a page is within its own space as it is within the governence of the poem. Now, if you were doing a painting, would you place a period after every brush stoke? A poem is like painting on a canvass in words--things go together while they might also be separate, and this spaciality implies the unity of the thought as composition.
When I see a lot of punctuation (and you might disagree), the first thing I wonder about is if the writer is writing words on a canvass, or is thinking in setences. But if you are thinking in sentences, then maybe you should be writing prose, not poetry.
For example, do you think I could take any 8 lines from a newspaper or magazine article and place them out in lines, making stanzas--and do you think this would be "New Found Art" and would this be poetry?
Well, I'm glad you opened my mind to this, because now I really got to think about all this inter-toublesome stuff because 30 yrs ago I was really into the "found art" idea. Now, I think I have to change and reformulate my idea of form.
So, forget everything I said, and I hope you don't mind I just used you as my mirror, and all I foumd in your writing was myself, and for this I thank you...
John
posted by
jfm32
on November 9, 2008 at 10:49 AM
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seems as though the sea is a good subject for poems, I am afraid if I was at sea now it would be restless
posted by
Lanetay
on November 9, 2008 at 10:37 AM
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