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hagi
I identify with you luv, I lived alone for over 7 years in this remote location, but in a small house and now it's filled with the life of love and Kabu, I wish that for you my friend.
posted by
WileyJohn
on July 11, 2008 at 3:43 PM
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Re: hagi
I'm trying... But sometimes, the nostalgia strucks with an unexpected force.
Then again, sometimes I shudder thinking how awful it was, living in a small apartment so far away from everybody else :)
Thanks, Wiley.
posted by
hagi
on July 10, 2008 at 10:15 PM
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hagi
That is lovely poetry, now if maybe it could be for real, go and make that home your home with the kiddies, flowers, and fun.
posted by
WileyJohn
on July 10, 2008 at 9:53 PM
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hagi, this is great prose as it is, and may I add my own encouragement,
whether in prose or poetry, "write on!".
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posted by
Rumor
on July 10, 2008 at 4:47 PM
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Actually Hagi, this is as a fine piece of prose. I was in the moment from your read and actually saw the images --- this is good ~ Hagi write on!!!~ Elyse
posted by
elysianfields
on July 10, 2008 at 6:28 AM
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what a beautiful story!
don't be shy!! sam is so right, dare taking a pen & a piece of paper. If it's coming from your heart, it will definitely be beautiful!
posted by
pelagus
on July 10, 2008 at 2:05 AM
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The answer to the "give poetry a try" suggestion turned out to be quite long, so I posted it in my
marginal notes blog
posted by
hagi
on July 9, 2008 at 11:04 PM
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Sounds like you have a great begining..I agree with Sam..Just pen some more stuff down and go for it!..See what happens..I don't think of myself as a true poet..Yet I still give it a go..So go on try it..You might find out that it is something you like..Would love to read more of this..Take care.
posted by
Wigopa_
on July 9, 2008 at 9:41 PM
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sweetheart, it feels a 'poem' to me already..how beautifully you rendered the lines....
posted by
__Purple_Mermaid11__
on July 9, 2008 at 8:22 PM
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Seriously, put it on paper and read it aloud and get a real feel for it and then edit! Don't be fearful, be creative! Have a wonderful day! sam
posted by
sam444
on July 9, 2008 at 12:10 PM
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