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Re: Dear Ash...
Thanks Sinome, for taking the time to explain..now I understand..engineers can sometimes be such thick-heads :)..peace..have a great day..u r awesome! - Ash
posted by
ash_pradhan
on June 26, 2008 at 7:52 PM
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Re: Very long but very unique.
Thank you so much for your comment Michaudblaine, she had different ideas of what retirement would be I guess... she miscalculated? I don't know, it is what it is, She was wonderful though. Thanks again.
posted by
Sinome
on June 26, 2008 at 7:39 PM
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Re: Wow! Is all I have to say, very touching! Yes just call me Clay!!
Thank you Clay, thank you very much.
posted by
Sinome
on June 26, 2008 at 7:34 PM
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I am glad you liked it Elyse, thank you very much
posted by
Sinome
on June 26, 2008 at 7:32 PM
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Thank you so much Nite Tide, I saw the typo and corrected it, I am afraid it had not been on purpose but I loved that you liked it :-). You are very sweet to help me Thanks again and I am glad you enjoyed reading it.
posted by
Sinome
on June 26, 2008 at 7:30 PM
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Re: wow!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Thank you Sue :-)
posted by
Sinome
on June 26, 2008 at 7:28 PM
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Re: Hi Marta of the sand-kissed oceans
Thank you so much Bhashkar, she was a grand lady in real life, I just hope she liked it.
posted by
Sinome
on June 26, 2008 at 7:27 PM
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Thank you so much Teddy, she sounds like a wonderful woman.
posted by
Sinome
on June 26, 2008 at 7:23 PM
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Thank you Marion, you are very kind.
posted by
Sinome
on June 26, 2008 at 7:21 PM
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Re: Excellent work my dear Sinome
Yes Maria, you are right, its way too easy and time rushes by... Thank you so much
posted by
Sinome
on June 26, 2008 at 7:20 PM
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Thank you so muh Shamasehar
posted by
Sinome
on June 26, 2008 at 7:18 PM
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Re: wonderful
Thank you so much
posted by
Sinome
on June 26, 2008 at 7:13 PM
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Thank you Troosha, I did, You are very sweet thanks
posted by
Sinome
on June 26, 2008 at 7:10 PM
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Thank you Hillow. There are many that do not understand that this kind of self sacrifice still happens every day. Its sad and wonderful at the same time... like a beautiful star that burns out. Welcome to my place... I hope to see you back :-)
posted by
Sinome
on June 26, 2008 at 3:25 PM
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Re: Tears are running down my cheeks
Thank you Malcolm, It makes me cry too. That is a wonderful compliment, means I reached your heart :-)
posted by
Sinome
on June 26, 2008 at 3:20 PM
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Re: wow sinome,
Thank you Mike, she was a wonderful lady :-)
posted by
Sinome
on June 26, 2008 at 3:19 PM
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Thank you Sam, You are too kind :-)
posted by
Sinome
on June 26, 2008 at 3:18 PM
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Re: I'm speechless...
Wo
w, Charles...thank you
posted by
Sinome
on June 26, 2008 at 3:17 PM
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Re: This is the best ever I have read and reread and you are amazing
THanks Kabu, glad you liked it.
posted by
Sinome
on June 26, 2008 at 3:16 PM
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I try dear Lestate, I try :-) Thank you so much
posted by
Sinome
on June 26, 2008 at 3:15 PM
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Re: What a thoughtful and beautiful poem ... you are so talented,
Thank you Vicki you are so sweet :-)
posted by
Sinome
on June 26, 2008 at 3:14 PM
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Re: It's simply a beautiful poem and so well written.
Thank you Afzal... :-)
posted by
Sinome
on June 26, 2008 at 3:13 PM
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Dear Ash, You would be surprised how many people of our generation are languishing in loneliness and despair, abandoned by their children and living with sadness and depression, but that aside, this poem was inspired by a dear friend who passed away a few months ago, it is not meant to be a reflection of a generation or a living plan for anyone to follow, nor is it a referendum for or against women choosing to stay home to raise their kids I was not trying to say in it that women have no options but to die alone., my Mom died at 76 and played tennis with me the week before she died ( and she won!) I never intended for anyone to think this is the way it has to be for most women. I apologize if in anyway you or anyone else felt typecaster or offended by it. I wrote it as a tribute to a wonderful woman who I witness to be a great mother and wonderful wife. She was a great, multi-talented, caring and loving person that did the best she could with the circunstances she was given. I feel totally unworthy to pass judgement on her or her way of life and I don't know anyone good enough to do so either. Thank you for your comment :-)
posted by
Sinome
on June 26, 2008 at 3:13 PM
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Sinome my friend, though this is an apt description...
of our parents' generation, please allow me to brighten it by saying that women, and men, of our generation have the opportunity to seriously evaluate our values / priorities to be able to live a balanced life till the end..I know a few folks who are well into their seventies, even eighties, who have had a balanced life and are still healthy enough to play active sports, travel, socialize...so all u dear ladies & gents, though this is a beautiful poem, please look at the positive side of life and chart your future course more optimistically, no matter what the past, bless u all :)! - Ash
posted by
ash_pradhan
on June 26, 2008 at 9:47 AM
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It's simply a beautiful poem and so well written.
posted by
afzal50
on June 26, 2008 at 4:13 AM
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What a thoughtful and beautiful poem ... you are so talented,
painting a perfect, heart wrenching story ... just wonderful sinome.
posted by
VictoriaP
on June 25, 2008 at 9:43 PM
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I'm A Fan my friend! you write and you are writer!
posted by
lestate7
on June 25, 2008 at 8:43 PM
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This is the best ever I have read and reread and you are amazing
what a journey and so much truth you have blown my mind.
posted by
Kabu
on June 25, 2008 at 8:37 PM
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I'm speechless...
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posted by
metalrat
on June 25, 2008 at 7:41 PM
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It is just a very stunning journey. Just stunning! sam
posted by
sam444
on June 25, 2008 at 1:17 PM
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I do not know where to start with my kudos for this exquisite write. This may be one of those times where wordless is more. I am taken away by this one. I just don't have words. I just don't. But I will say, these are my favorite poems, those that leave me speechless. I need to read this once more. Simply wonderful! sam
posted by
sam444
on June 25, 2008 at 1:14 PM
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wow sinome,
just breathe taking, what a wonderful view on women and their love...mike
posted by
meeks2
on June 25, 2008 at 12:29 PM
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Tears are running down my cheeks
for you have captured the essence of injustice and loss. Absolutely beautiful and thanks for writing it down here.
posted by
malcolm
on June 25, 2008 at 12:10 PM
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BRAVO!!! You have completely captured the very essence of self sacrifice on behalf of so many women in the world - what it is they become - what it is they feel but often can't explain. This is a magnificent piece of writing.
posted by
Hilow
on June 25, 2008 at 10:27 AM
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Wow – I think what made this such a compelling read is that many of can see ourselves in this woman. This is outstanding, Sinome. You poured your heart into this one. In that, there is no doubt.
posted by
Troosha
on June 25, 2008 at 10:18 AM
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wonderful
you convey true sadness with these lines. Thank you
posted by
lionreign
on June 25, 2008 at 6:48 AM
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excellent,poignant,powerful,outstanding & so beautifully expressed .
posted by
shamasehar
on June 25, 2008 at 3:54 AM
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Excellent work my dear Sinome
so many of us have been there and can relate; it's so easy to loose yourself in the passing years being everything for everybody but yourself; well done my friend; thank you and God bless
posted by
mariaki
on June 25, 2008 at 3:30 AM
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A powerfully heart felt and touching work..That just sent memory after memory leaping through my head..Your imagery and flow was just exquisite..Most defintely a must read for everyone!
posted by
Wigopa_
on June 25, 2008 at 12:51 AM
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Absolutely beautiful, my friend...as I read, I saw my mother sitting in her corner of the kitchen, reading long into the night while she waited for my father to return home from work...her Dream was to be a journalist but, as in your poem, Life interrupted with children, dogs and a myriad which filled her moments until she, too, found her way to a better place...Truly wonderful writing, Sinome....outstanding.
posted by
teddypoet_TheGoodByeFade
on June 24, 2008 at 11:37 PM
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Hi Marta of the sand-kissed oceans
I have loved every single word, the feelings of gloom, the backyard and the birds providing sustenance to a dark dank soul when needed most, the loss of husband, children being distant busy in their own pursuits, and then suddenly, the tale veering off to the sadness of reminiscings of indulgence almost to the point of bringing wrinkles to this once young beautiful loving lovely lady, ultimately to its denouement, and in it, the denouement not darkening the gloom, but in her realization by the touch of Providence bringing light and in her becoming a star, which she always was, and which she did realize, as we all realize only when its too late, some never do. Excellent! Marvelous!! Phenomenal!!!
posted by
Bhaskar.ing
on June 24, 2008 at 11:19 PM
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wow!!!!!!!!!!!!!
posted by
Star5_
on June 24, 2008 at 10:36 PM
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Wow, a story of love, trial, and regret....that was so unbelievably beautiful. To read the journey that you took us on through this woman's life was truly amazing and I could feel my heart go out to her as she regretted the moments of excitement that she allowed to pass right by her. But it ended wonderfully with her becoming a star in the night...that was just lovely.
One question: Did you use the word "bye" on purpose? I thought the word made it far more powerful as if the woman's mind was saying her farewells, but I wasn't sure if this surprise was done on purpose or if it happened to be a simple mistake that turned into a wonderful meaning. Either way, I absolutely love this poem!!! Bravo!!
posted by
NiteTide
on June 24, 2008 at 10:26 PM
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Powerful, Powerful ~ I felt as if you were writing the story of my mother ... to the very end. This will haunt me...touched my soul!~ Marta, God bless you ~ Elyse
posted by
elysianfields
on June 24, 2008 at 9:45 PM
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Wow! Is all I have to say, very touching! Yes just call me Clay!!
posted by
kingclay
on June 24, 2008 at 9:02 PM
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Very long but very unique.
This blank verse poem told of a woman's life of giving. Always giving with very little receiving. A woman who lived through her family and children hoping and wishing to connect. She gave of herself with little in return. What she did not do was p lan for a future in retirement. A retirement to more interesting things and goals and objectives.
posted by
michaudblaine
on June 24, 2008 at 8:58 PM
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