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Like the freshness and rhythm of the piece. After your first stanza --ok, I like to be hit over the head with an opening line...after all, attention is attention--and I started reading wondering what else to unexpect (did I just say that right?). Was pleasantly surpized with each turn into next line, (I love surprizes). Felt I took a little trip to someplace. Not sure where, maybe I just liked traveling.
John
posted by
jfm32
on May 26, 2008 at 8:11 AM
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patmanplus ~.~
Very well said. I wrote a piece that sends the same message about nature's purpose and plan and man's interference ("The Vanity of Man" - May 18, 2008.) Thank you for sharing. Peace, blessings and understanding.
~SS
posted by
soulspeaker
on May 25, 2008 at 10:19 PM
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Unique poem :-) Interesting style. Keep writing!
posted by
Sinome
on May 25, 2008 at 6:04 PM
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