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Joe, I find this speaking simply ~ You'll always be a part of me, period. Part of your soul, your being ~ and I find it wonderful. I find your poem with
just the right amount of depth; because simply your bottom line is the fullness of DEPTH ~
~ Write on Joe ~ Elyse
This poem is of a passionate, loving 'feeling' and desire.
posted by
elysianfields
on May 11, 2008 at 8:36 PM
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John
So, Johnny boy, I take it from what I can understand, the poem sucked, I am a bit confused, but okay, Qhat exactly did I catapult : was that a good thing o r bad thing, you got some splainin' to do.... Re: crust .Didn't 'I cook the apples enuf? 
joe
posted by
LongoGeremia
on May 11, 2008 at 8:06 PM
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Hope you don't mind this comment, but I read this poem twice, and still trying to figure why I'm bored out of my skull. It's as if I'm sitting on the beach watching and counting the waves come in, but nothing happens. Oh, so I shouldn't expect anything out of a poem? Then why am I reading?
It seems to me, you got a good pie crust but no pie:
"It's not my imagination that makes me see the (this) shadow of you".
Now you got me interested, so where"s the rest of the story? The fact is you don't have one--yet, because you haven't invented it.
Don't expect me, or anyone else to wallow in the mirror with you. All you gonna find there is other spirits who like to wallow. Is that what you're looking for?
I don't know why I'm writing this kind of comment. Might be that I'm writing myself because we've all been somplace. But I've also come to beleive that to arrive at literature is almost like being touched by an unknown saint. No, the memory of past existence cannot obliterate the pain inherent in that experience (would you rather we had none?).
I was about to write my next paragraph when I noticed Time is limited
(oh, really?). To get to the point, coincidental, or not, I've been needing to say something to myself for some time now. The way things worked out, coincidental or not, you just happened to be IT in the tag game.
I think it's only proper, now, I should make full confession: When I first started, I was walking on a feeling, and had no idea the ball was going to bounce back into my court. Well, this changed things because I wasn't writing you, I was writing myself.
Here's the issue: I unknowingly used you as a catylist, and do you mind?
John
posted by
jfm32
on May 11, 2008 at 7:19 PM
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