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You went deep into the well on this one, one has to really pay attention.
Life is steadty and strong, lifeless sadness, lonely, no joy seams long. Rich spirit true time moves on. Fleshless soul's light is dim. We write to give light to our soul song.
posted by
Mystereo
on January 23, 2009 at 5:53 PM
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Re: Got the feeling, before reading, a bit of Dylan Thomas
I wanted to thank you for looking over my first poem on here. I wasn't sure what to expect when I started here. "Words" is a work that has been bouncing around in my head for a while now. I wrote it down a few times thinking I could re-work it and found that it is just one of those things that I get stuck looking at and wondering how to make it great. Then I wondered if it was just another word play that I did to get myself into writing.
You are more the welcome to look over any of my poems and let me know what you think. I welcome any input (good or bad) that you may have to offer.
I have found that I like your short prose "Another Reality" well written and I am left with alluring feeling that there is some other meaning hidden in there that I apon future thought will be clearer to me.
Again thanks for crituqe,
Marion
posted by
Wigopa_
on February 24, 2008 at 6:19 PM
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Got the feeling, before reading, a bit of Dylan Thomas
Was a little surprised with the brevity of lines, and the lyricm set as words into space. Got the feeling I might be missing something--the lyiric of the line, the breath, and the spoken sentence (as a written line). I guess I just wanted to read 4 well-written lines, rather to to see a painting of your thought.
I know this problem well: What you hear in your head, and how to put it on the page. One thing we poets seem to forget is that we are just messengers, delivering a message to whomever will read us. Maybe that's the rub: we know in our hearts what we, ourselves, would like to hear. I guess that makes us everybody, and we don't always know how to do that. That's why we experiment.
So, before I finish this book (yes, I have no sense of humor)just wanted to say, hi, and note that if you hadn't written what you did, I wouldn't be relating to it. So, anything I might have said, or implied,
here, is probably relative to some other universe.
If you would like to converse, email me
John
posted by
jfm32
on February 24, 2008 at 5:30 PM
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